Thursday, 18 August 2011

a mute question

I mold myself
is it viable-
what you ask of me?
tall order
a promise
extracted from my soul
would I let go-
a mute question
you can cut a part of whole
you don't see gasp of horror

I find you again, and again,
lose you every other day
to what, I know not


  1. sounds as if the narrator is considering changing for another
    person, usually a bad idea.

    authentic writing- the words ring

  2. the only one we can truly change is ourselves...

  3. Gautami...
    People just need to worry about themselves.
    Loved your POV 55.
    Thanks for playing, and have a Kick Ass Week-End

  4. I can read this as a struggle between two people in love, but it speaks to me as part of an inner struggle. Especially the last verse. I find myself again and again and then get lost. Nice write. I love your layers.

  5. You must always be as you wish to be and not even think of changing yourself to suit someone else's need for how you ought to be unless of course you are in need of improving yourself, then there is always room for change.
    Lovely prose.

  6. Sounds insecure. I'm glad I'm not in that position.

  7. Is the order too tall? Let him come to you.

  8. when you can't choose or when you don't really know what you want, it would be very hard to answer "a mute question." :( great writing. thought provoking.

  9. the finding and losing again and again make a huge impact

  10. A deeply felt dilemma. Hold true to yourself.

  11. I like seeing the world through different perspectives..thank you!

  12. Well- people can ask us to mold ourselves- but if it is cutting away too much of who we are, we better let go !!
    I am afraid I learned the hard way on that one. Thanks!

  13. Never mold yourself if you can't be who you are you will both be unhappy. Great poem.

  14. smart 55,

    thanks for sharing.

  15. I really love those last three lines. Wistful.

  16. Like this. I confess I've turned down offers before too...
    Sometimes letting go of a self-built life isin't so simple- especially if you'll feel like property...

    Found you at Jannies again. Every few now n thens I write poems also- not all the time, n never on cue.
    I'll return

  17. Hello, how are you?

    Glad to land in your lovely land of wonders. Excellent talent!

    Hope all is well.

    Appreciated your support to The Gooseberry Garden, your inputs add light to our place, we would love to see you around weekly…

    Random piece or old ones are welcome too.

    Bless you.
    Happy End of August.
    Hope to see you around!