Sunday 12 June 2011

if only he could see behind

the wall was built long ago
he sat in front of it
tried to look sad
he missed sounds, shadows
his muted form
saw it slipping through fingers-
willed it to stop

21 comments:

  1. I love this poem. I feel as if it speaks so much to my own experience. As direct as a straight line to the heart. Thank you.

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  2. Walling off from experiences. Thanks for playing along with the Sunday 160.

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  3. Good to be here...as usual..one gets something very different and unique in poetry..

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  4. This is so sad, Gautami.

    A very profound poem.

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  5. Excellent !

    A true poet seeks, asks questions and is inspired to find answers contained deep in each soul through their creations...you touch so many with your talent and I am grateful to be able to ponder each creation !

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  6. Cuts to the chase.

    Nice job.

    =)

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  7. Ghostly and mysterious, the top of an iceberg story peeking through. The italics in the last line give that wish so much strength, I like the effect.

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  8. Thanks for this haunting poem - sad and hopeful and yet resigned.

    Namaste..........cj

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  9. What a haunting and poignant gem of poetry you shared here with us.

    Your writing is so skillful.

    You cast your imagery so vividly. Thank you for sharing this.

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  10. It is sad, but there is still strength within. Simple, but nice.

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  11. POignant Gautami!

    But who could break the wall that divides? Thanks for sharing this piece, it speaks so much!

    I am at wordpress now dear. I remember you tellin me how difficult for you to comment on my blog...please drop by when you are free!

    Yours,

    Amity

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  12. So unusual and so thoughtful.

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  13. 'his muted form'could convey the whole of it.
    An expression put in words so well.

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  14. Powerful and haunting, you've conveyed so much in so few words. I had to come back and read this again. I enjoyed it very much.

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  15. So sad when someone builds a wall like this you have a great insight!

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  16. Short and impactful.The sentiments are carved beautifully.Great work.

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  17. Always visiting the darkside!

    I guess that brings out the best in you........

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