Tuesday 7 June 2011

eye for an eye

















while walking the ground
I found a white rounded stone
I drilled a hole
polished it,
found a lid to match
a perfect shape
I altered it into an eye
a beady eye
that stares at me,
tranquil

"I fondly keep my burdens locked in it"

44 comments:

  1. When your creation from stone stares back at you—an interesting thought. Like this one very much.

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  2. the last line is the stunner. interesting that the eye is represented like a stone or stone cold about it

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  3. Your quote makes me end feeling inside out - but maybe that's where I started

    Edgar Allen Poe would love this

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  4. Love this - so simple and powerful

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  5. TOTally ooky, as it should be. Kudos.

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  6. guess it certainly gives you a different perspective..haha...nice piece.

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  7. Love the last line! This is a very intriguing poem =)

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  8. Stone cold eye...hmm...interesting.

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  9. I don't know about Poe, but I'm sure Dali would like this - it's surreal.

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  10. Eww but aah..stones are tranquil..and I am sure they watch us too..Jae

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  11. Nicely done ... interesting imagery!

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  12. Very original take on the prompt...

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  13. Your poem is so unique ... thoroughly enjoyable

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  14. I am happy to be back here.. it is a beautiful read.. enjoyed every line..thanks Gautamy..

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  15. Gautami, your poem fits that unnerving pic quite well.

    Pamela

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  16. Gautami...
    Creepy and Awesome!!

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  17. Very cool! Love the image of the unblinking eye, always staring. Well done.

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  18. excellent...I love the last line especially!

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  19. A bit of a goose-bump generator, but it is so original, I really like it.

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  20. A very interesting picture and even more interesting use of the words. Chilling!

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  21. Very creative! I can't say I would have made a beady eye-but I do like your
    perspective- thanks!

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  22. You let that stone eye come alive.

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  23. We all keep our burdens within a staring eye within us. I really like your take on this one Gautami,

    Elizabeth

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  24. Phew, I've got a thing about funny eyes!

    <3

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  25. I think that eye will wait until the lock turns, the door opens....

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  26. Very unusual - but surely a valid place for 'burdens'.

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  27. I really like the idea of creating a tranquil eye in which to keep ones burdens.

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  28. A watchful eye, yet beady and stares, you create - interesting. Tranquil, and keeping your burdens - so you are relieved from the weight and now tranquil yourself? The underlying reason for this creation? Or discovered after? So many fascinating possibilities, and all intriguing. Excellent. I do like it quite a bit. Thank you. Beauty is in the eye, even a created one of rock, of the beholder :-)

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  29. A wonderful way to lock away troubles in the cold stare of an eye! A beautifully worked poem!

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  30. This piece is so sharp and well done.

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  31. If only we could keep our burdens locked in a stone. Nice piece.

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  32. Great! I love the fact that the eye-box creates a tranquil place and that you fondly store burdens in it. Burdens need to be locked away, but when you do it fondly you are embracing your complete self; you are whole. Marvelous!

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  33. Like Pinocchio, a real live eye! Interesting what comes to land and thought. And that last line sets it all off so differently. Nice.

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  34. So gorgeous, that concept, a bit like the sculptor who sees the object within the block of marble. Loved this, Gautami. I'm having a hard time posting the pic on my blog, so in the meantime, 3WW! Amy
    http://sharplittlepencil.wordpress.com/2011/06/11/prompt-etiquette-3ww/

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