Wednesday 24 March 2010

doing the undoing

I come undone
in totality
when your brazen hunger
nuzzles me
I nuzzle into you
my hunger is not brazenly defined
yet it too totally
does you in

15 comments:

  1. Certainly gets the idea across--wow.

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  2. Beautiful words, I love the way you wrote this!

    <3 Andy

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  3. Well written, and very strong!

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  4. I really like the heat of this, the obvious desire.

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  5. I have been missing you, something ghostly this way came....;)

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  6. WOW. Despite being an Indian and a Mathematics teacher, you are really really good!

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  7. A kind of Jack Sprat and his wife scenario, only much more subtly portrayed.

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  8. A touch of seriousness and a touch of wry humour! Love the mix!

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  9. Love the counterpoint - you come undone - he is done in - great stuff!

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  10. Wow...this is really an exciting take on the prompt Gautami...I could feel the excitement...:))

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  11. Oooh, great job -- you portray the passionate cross currents so well. :)

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  12. an exchange without cost...yes, no!!??

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