Saturday 13 March 2010

a curse or a plea

wherever you move
going this way
or that
the murmur of my sorrow
will haunt you

in your mirror
you will see only me
my smiling facade
turned into its own shadow
will haunt you

I was never there
I will never be there
yet I held a place for a while
in your mind, which
will haunt you

consider it a curse,
or a plea,
I will continue to haunt you

22 comments:

  1. The pain and sorrow come out so clearly in your words.

    Beautiful, heartbreaking.

    quid

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  2. No wonder I don't like shaving in the morning.

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  3. Persistent and taunting -- well written Gautami...
    ...rob

    Here is my murmur...

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  4. An excellent chill to this one.

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  5. thats painfully beautiful !!!

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  6. A lot of pain and sorrow in this one. It appears he thought you were there, and yet all along you were not. Intriguing. Maybe time (and another) heal wounds of the heart.

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  7. So it goes. I have been haunted in this way. You paint an amazing picture here.

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  8. yes... this is a sad murmur today.. loved it though.. good one!

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  9. powerful. almost like a obssesive
    love potion. written very real.

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  10. There might not have been too much of a place in the life but I see you left strong footprints in the mind...well done :)

    http://liquidicemusing.blogspot.com

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  11. silently powerful...it haunts you.

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  12. Very powerful...and haunting. I find the last line--consider it a curse, or a plea--intriguing. Well done!

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  13. Continue to haunt this space with your words.

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  14. a hauntingly familiar song. or curse. I suspect most of us have a similar ghost. such is the nature of love and loss.

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  15. So much emotion and angst in this poem...you captured that sorrowful feeling beautifully.

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  16. We all feel like that sometimes...hurt, and angry!! but you've portrayed the emotions very well...

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  17. An amazing work here, very well done :)

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  18. Perpetual murmuring - and yes, it is haunting.

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  19. I can so relate to this its scary! Beautifully written

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