Thursday 20 August 2009

static of the radio bustles at me














I dip the spoon into the coagulated milk
and let out coarse curses
I rant like a diode gone wrong
static of the radio bustles at me
your salacious sagas bore me to death
I run away and hitch a ride
and think of the fling I had long ago
now leaving behind another rancid past
I am homeward bound
enjoying the ride in that 8-track road
elocution of my joy akin to froth

25 comments:

  1. Good poem GT.The secret is in the 7 minutes.

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  2. Powerful and a good combination of the words.

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  3. Nothing pisses me more off than cream gone bad in my coffee, I relate lol love the rant here ;)

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  4. another winner...7 minutes, huh? Mine took 7 DAYS and is not nearly as good...

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  5. I love that last line! It so perfectly draws a picture the joy!

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  6. Hello Gautami,

    This story works! I like "and think of the fling I had long ago
    now leaving behind another rancid past"

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  7. This is very good Gautami!

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  8. I love how this poem intrigues; it balances on the fine edge of my not understanding it (which is NOT a bad thig at all). Rather, it tempts me with another view, a different world, raises poetic questions...

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  9. I'm amazed at how different people's poems can be using a similar set of words (even some not specified). So many great stories, including yours. Glad to discover your blog too.

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  10. You really do a great job with this week's words!

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  11. Love the sound of "let out coarse curses"

    I agree with Deborah that I'm not sure if I completely grasp it, but the sounds are lovely and it draws me in.

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  12. gautami your brevity works well with this poem, short bursts that place the reader on the side of the narrator. the challenge words couple nicely with the subject matter. -lawrence

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  13. Nice write of the words.. and done so quickly.

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  14. All those words - combined to great effect.

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  15. I'm pleased with the title you chose -- it's my favorite line ... I love the energy in it, and in the poem.

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  16. My god. U spinned a nice one here. Like a story

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  17. This one might have been over my head, but I just couldn't get the significance of the italicised words. Did I miss something? Probably. I liked it anyway.

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  18. Ok, I get the exercise now. I commented too soon!

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  19. From Therese B. at RWP -- coarse curses from coagulated milk -- I can hear them now.

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  20. My favourite line here has to be "enjoying the ride in that 8-track road". Good use of the words here. I like.

    -Nicole

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  21. oh, my!
    I have done this myself, although not with the 8-track playing.
    great work!

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  22. good one for sure...again...7 mins are good. I often write in 7 mins or ......but usually cary arround in my head for hours ...days...months or many years.

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  23. This is absolutely great poetry. I loved the use of salacious, 8-track and froth. Keep up the good work.

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  24. What a beautiful thing your words created. Thanks so much

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  25. I love "salacious sagas." Good use of the words throughout. I like how the anger seems to cool when the speaker hits the road.

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