Wednesday 12 August 2009

fired blue vase

that pale blue vase
made with expertise
captured her essence
when I held it in my hands
I missed her terribly

last masterpiece of his
helped me break his head
that vase qualifying as a weapon
was only a fitting tribute
for all she had suffered

jinxed it might have been for him
when he made that vase,
coloured it blue
fired from her calcified remains
from his own furnace

my revenge being complete
I filled it with daffodils and crocuses
cherishing her memories

26 comments:

  1. when he made that vase,
    coloured it blue
    fired from her calcified remains

    Delicious :-)

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  2. Wow, dark and brooding. I like this very much.

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  3. I love the darkness in this. It's bitter and sweet

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  4. The mind of a pessimist and the Soul of an artist, you are unbelievably talented!

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  5. I loved the ending it is very .... final, it brings closure (for me at least) for the vase it's self.
    Lovely.

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  6. Now that was a useful vase/urn. Sinister coupled with bit of retribution. Great take on the prompt.

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  7. works well for carry on tuesday too!

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  8. Dark, biting and sharp...wonderful read!

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  9. a masterpiece!
    bravo!

    http://fart-in-a-jar.blogspot.com/2009/08/confused.html

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  10. Absolutely marvellous! Sinister and dark yet it brough a hint of a smile to my face!

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  11. Fired from her calcified remains - eerie...

    Dark, but then revenge is sweet!

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  12. Sweet,sweet revenge...dark and ironic...brilliant!

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  13. Like this!! Not vengeful, but I can think it LOL! Great writing :)

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  14. The vase hold the mean for his end. Hope it is not real:). Good piece.

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  15. This is a great poem. I feel as though some frustrations were released while still remembering the loved one in a kind way. Hope all is well. Have a great night.

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  16. This was a very dark piece. Wow. It reminded me of Devil in the White City, especially the furnace.

    *shuddering*

    Great writing and story telling!

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  17. Nice work. Love and revenge together..

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  18. Excellent - thanks for sharing...

    --SoC

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  19. Such an innocent-sounding item, yet so sinister. Nicely done!

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  20. I'm afraid...I'm very afraid.

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  21. dark! very dark!

    liked the first verse a lot...

    :)

    One Big Happy Family

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  22. wow! I love the way the prompt words all tied this together.
    Jinx is a hard word and in this it makes perfect sense.
    happy 3WW!

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  23. holy moly... that was dark and a bit creepy. fun to read outloud, slowly.

    Gautami - re: 3:15, you can join us any time! You don't have to do the whole month. :-)

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