Thursday 23 July 2009

loves dances from a to z

angelically moving

like a belly dancer

who convolutes to a tune

she draped herself into him

her ethereal presence

formulated certain

gentle feelings

in that stone heart

inching towards his soul

he jack-knifed

knocking her

lovely form aside

as soon moribund

naked emotions

took over

progressing

quantifying

regressing

into sadness

like a heavy tomb

of umbrella.

a vellum fell from sky

walls demolished

x-axis of their love

intersected at y and z-axis.

"Love has to be three dimensional or may be four"

22 comments:

  1. Hello Gautami,

    A soft, gentle and sad poem. Clever to have had it already written!

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  2. Each word works in its place -- great job.

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  3. Clever, witty and fun to read.

    I enjoyed it!

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  4. wonderful work, Gautami! and you got the whole alphabet in there as well!!

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  5. You are brilliant. You can even write a poem just through alphabet.

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  6. Awe, everything must intersect somewhere. This is beautiful. Hope your arm is feeling better today.

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  7. You've recycled words from a previous prompt and made it work.

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  8. Wow...Like all dimensions here

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  9. I love how you bring your mathematical prowess into play, as well as your words!

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  10. Can't imagine how you do this, it's awesome, you're very talented, impressively so, arm better today?

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  11. Nice one. And isn't it a good feeling to follow own rules and to succeed at least?

    Best wishes
    Ralf

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  12. i would definitely say this fits the bill for our dictionary exercise. this is executed wonderfully, the bolding of alphabetical missives a nice touch. beautifully worded. -lawrence

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  13. Especially enjoying the final lines: "x-axis of their love /
    intersected at y and z-axis."

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  14. The entire alphabet! Lovely.

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  15. Lovely! I think your words really leave the reader with a sad, romantic feeling.

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  16. somewhat sad....another nice poem

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  17. "Love has to be three dimensional or may be four"

    Well that is taking things ta a whole new level....E=Mc squared.

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  18. Loved flowing along with your music in this poem!

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  19. This flows as I imagine dancing with my love. (You wove those prompt words in seamlessly.) Well done!

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