Thursday 6 September 2007

Ode to Tiredness-----With due apologies to Keats---Poetry Thursday

bones feel dead
each single muscles is going limp
eyes are drooping,
ears stop hearing.

body refuses to rest
cracked voice cannot let out a thing-
brain cells go numb,
thoughts fly away.

sleep is absent
inactive yet awareness persist
supine, stupefied feet
lay limp with fatigue.

in that restful state
where mind sleeps body moves-
where body sleeps mind dances-
I stand in attention

saluting, paying tribute
to our dear friend,
otherwise known as tiredness.

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For more poetry, click, The Travelling Poetry Show, hosted by Left-handed trees.

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Do read the previous post, for you, my friend and pray for her.

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**Update: I have received two blog awards from two different sources:
1)


This is from
ces.


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2)
Award

This one is from A E Roman

I thank you both.

I don't know if I am supposed to pass those on. I might do so in a while.

30 comments:

  1. You nail it. This is how I feel every day coming home from work. Great flow of words. :)

    Now, that mentions of Keats in the title really make me curious. Hmm, guess I need to find that poem... Thanks :)

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  2. a great description of this familiar visitor :)
    thank you

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  3. You described it so well, this friend of mine!:)

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  4. Tiredness of spirit. Need to recharge.

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  5. You show the emotion very well.

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  6. LOL--no fatigue here--kiddos started back to school today. Yippie! I'm free. . . freeeeee. . .

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  7. you described my friend very well. :)

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  8. Awesome poem! It's great to be tired when I'm in bed, terrible when I'm anywhere else.

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  9. A feeling I can well relate to this morning, after a night dominated by restless dogs!

    Very nicely conveyed!

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  10. I prefer to pay tribute with my snores, not always the case. You nailed it perfectly!!

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  11. You did a wonderful job of expressing how the mind does not always sleep.

    I will keep your friend in my prayers. I'm very sorry. HUGS

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  12. what a unique and awesome subject.
    as long as my mind does not tire, I shall be happy :)

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  13. Unfortunately, this tired feeling is my life!

    And I hope your friend recovers soon.

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  14. Mmmm... I think I need a nap now! Great words.

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  15. sleep is life's own vacation.... i support it wildly...
    in answer to your question on my post... my aggressive use of punctuation is very simply,,, the way,,that i write.....

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  16. Gautami, I don't think Keats would mind; no reason why he should. I enjoyed the way form in this poem handles the common scourge.

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  17. "supine, stupefied feet/lay limp with fatigue" is such a great line. I especially like "stupefied"! It's the feet that seem to feel it first and longest...on me anyway!

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  18. This is EXACTLY how I feel right now. I worked all day (seven hours) on my feet, and I am beyond tired.

    Michele sent me.

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  19. This was a great, Gautami- you made tiredness sound so poetic!

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  20. You captured the feeling perfectly!

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  21. Congratulations on your two blogger awards! Post them proudly.

    I really love these lines in your poem:
    "where mind sleeps body moves-
    where body sleeps mind dances-"
    Perfect.

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  22. Ooh, I hope my body didn't get ideas from this!

    congrats on the awards!

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  23. *Eeih! beautifull,beautiful. A long time since i read poem with such a unique flow of rhyme. i can't stop myself from reading it over and over gain. Thank God u r a blogger!

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  24. Oh gautami, I soooo get 'the tiredness' poem...Beautifully expressed, my dear...And I truly have been feeling pretty exhausted these days...spent fro the awful awful heat we had for almost 8 days straight...So, I "get" it!

    And Michele does, too....
    I was trying to post over there and had to do the word verificatiob SIX times...I just cannot see that thing most of the time....! Anyway, by the time I got back---you had posted before me---SO, I posted again at Michele's and this time I read and typed the WV the first time and was correct! HOORAY! (lol)

    Anyway, so happy to be here!

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  25. ah...i know this and you have articulated it exactly.
    Love,
    D.

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  26. Congratulations on your well-deserved awards!!

    You said this perfectly. Even if I didn't know the feeling, I would know it from your words.

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  27. I...can...really...relate...to...this...one....

    Good job! (Sigh)

    (Yawn)...Pardon me.

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  28. Gautami, keep it or pass it on if you wish, to five bloggers who inspire you. You certainly not only inspired me with sleep on this poem, I think you were looking at me when you wrote this. Hahahha! I feel tired just like that! :-)

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  29. i collapsed upon each new line until there was no line to hold me anymore.

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  30. Wow...you wrapped out how I've been feeling for three weeks now! I'm sure others could relate too. It's a very busy time. I can't wait to get back to my blogging self.

    Glad to see you're still a inspirational visit my dear. take care, and thanks for visiting me!

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