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| Still Life, 1670, detail by Jean François de Le Motte |
assorted letters
a notebook
pages from a book
a sealed envelope
newspaper cuttings
I see all those
that expression of yours
when writing
or that intense look when reading
strings of the past lay askew
tied neatly in a disreputable thread
photo frame riveted to the wooden wall
why does it stab at my heart
you hung her head
where did you throw her costume
eyeless she doesn't appear wanting
I can see clearly now
the wicked intricacies of your mind
"I do not wish to be a newspaper cut out,
ribboned to your collection"
Very interesting take on the prompts! Loved esp the last line in quotes! Enjoyed the read... :)
ReplyDeleteOld pages invite prying
her costume is probably somewhere beneath the mess on my desk...thoughtful words
ReplyDeletecool and authentic - solid piece
ReplyDeleteAwesome..brilliantly creative..
ReplyDeletegreat pun in "hung her head"
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Love the last line!
ReplyDelete...and the quote infinitely seals it...nice piece...
ReplyDeleteThis is delightful, fresh, made me smile. Your work is always so.
ReplyDeleteI really like the way you work. People are picking up on stuff you may not be deliberately doing even while you are wise enough to choose rich words so that these things can happen. That's the best way.
ReplyDeleteSo creative...beautiful
ReplyDeletePhoto frame riveted, your heart stabbed. Disembodied head, costume not in the shot, man, gautami, this is amazing stuff. Peace, Amy
ReplyDeletehttp://sharplittlepencil.com/2012/06/11/ugly/
what an emotionally charged piece.. thanks for posting
ReplyDeleteThis is a really interesting and compelling take on what I thought was a difficult prompt.
ReplyDeleteEnjoyed the way you strung or should that be hung this
ReplyDelete"I do not wish to be a newspaper cut out,ribboned to your collection"
ReplyDeleteBeautiful words, Gautami! Your verse has a smooth flow
Hank
It bites with brash venom in a very stylish way! A lively read!
ReplyDeleteThought provoking and quite sad; the detritus of a lost relationship.
ReplyDeleteawesome!..
ReplyDeleteJJRod'z
"strings of the past lay askew
ReplyDeletetied neatly in a disreputable thread"
My favorite part. This is a delicious read.
truly wonderful and interesting piece...xx
ReplyDeleteIts those traces....those leftover things, some physical, some not that pull the chain of memories and cause them to come raining down. Sometimes I feel I could have tried a little harder to put up with those that I didn't find to my taste...but then again. Wonderful.
ReplyDeleteLove the flow of this, and the last two lines are stellar.
ReplyDeletehttp://www.kimnelsonwrites.com/2012/06/08/lighten-your-own-load/
A very lovely and well-written poem.......deep and thoughtful
ReplyDeleteI love the way you use this poem to explain the way a writer's mind stores away memories, using odd prompts to stimulate the brain into producing their work until one observer realizes that nothing is off limits to a truly creative person. May 'wicked intricacies" continue to plague my mind too!
ReplyDeleteawesome...!!
ReplyDeleteOh so nicely written....and I'm happy that I'm not a newspaper period! Ha! Ha!
ReplyDeleteWow, beautiful! Very good piece of writing.
ReplyDeleteI wouldn't want to be part of someone's collection either.
ReplyDeleteWell said :)
Well expressed!
ReplyDeleteBrilliant as ever.
ReplyDeleteI love how you tied in both of these prompts. The last few lines made me smile. I saw a little humor in it, though I know the ending is quite serious. I enjoyed reading your lovely poem.
ReplyDeleteNever thought the prompt can lead to something like this too. I am truly honored to read such poetry.
ReplyDeleteVery beautiful and brilliant.
ReplyDeleteLove the suggestion here. It leads us into dark places.
ReplyDeleteYes, suggestive of dark...well written!
ReplyDeleteReally intriguing. I especially liked these iines:
ReplyDeleteyou hung her head
where did you throw her costume