half in shadows
my glasses hiding my eyes
the tears stream down
your shadow on my jacket
provides a kind of security blanket
I look so aloof
the boards behind enhance that
do you think
standing at the crossroads
is an easy task?
fetch that inkpot
let me pen my last note
let me raise it for your health
"my watch stopped long time ago"
standing at the crossroads- well written. Love the last line.
ReplyDeleteLove the last three lines.
ReplyDeletetears stream down your shadow on my jacket...just beautiful! Thank you.
ReplyDeletegreat way to combine prompts.
ReplyDeletei like the shadow being a blanker
I'm with boog - the last three lines lift your poem into place in my soul.
ReplyDeleteAll you have to do is wind it up!
ReplyDeleteLove how you used the shadow as something more concrete:)
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This is such a beautiful piece. So full of emotion and heart. Beautiful photo as well.
ReplyDeleteWhat an emotive piece. Isn't it strange how breakups hurt so much more the longer you delay their happening.
ReplyDeleteI loved the play on words with "my watch stopped long ago." It was as though your duty had been completed but he could not see it.
your shadow on my jacket
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I was stuck by these lines.. beautiful, Gautami.. as always.. great work..
"your shadow on my jacket
ReplyDeleteprovides a kind of security blanket" Liked this line. Nice!:)
Another poignant piece..your last lines always leave me with a story in themselves..Jae
ReplyDeleteWow Gautami.....superbly written piece. Such a different take on a picture!! And the end. ah! so unique and delightful:)
ReplyDeleteDropping by from Jingle Poetry
deep, wonderful magpie.
ReplyDeletewell done...at the crossroads and there in the closing line as well..
ReplyDeleteClever! :)
ReplyDeletenice work, fun and interesting!
ReplyDeletehappy gooseberry day!
http://lynnaima.wordpress.com/2011/12/19/in-the-silence/
excellent tale.
ReplyDeleteThanks for sharing with poetry picnic.
loved this - I could almost hear the intake of breath as the writer turns from fear to writing it out.
ReplyDeletewonderful poem & image ... seamless weaving of the prompts!
ReplyDeletebeautiful talent shining here.
ReplyDeleteIncredible work,
Happy Holidays….
if you write Haiku, welcome sharing with us,
1 to 3 or more are welcome.
no theme.
Hope to see you in,
Smiles!
I found this to be mysterious. I liked "your shadow on my jacket".
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