Tuesday, 13 December 2011

elemental pulsations


pulsations of the elements
grip the spasm
the boat is an enigma
I feel weightless in sand
tumbling in a rare medium
the spacious vastness 
pulls me in rapid succession
I am released into a misty glass
shedding my clothes, I bared my soul too
I watch the boat take away my hubris

"wipe the mist and look at the sky,
light is never far away"
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21 comments:

  1. Marianne13 December 2011 at 12:59

    Gorgeous poem .. compliments the picture perfectly!

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  2. Cheryl13 December 2011 at 13:58

    This is really trippy! The words fit the picture perfectly. I kept going back and forth. One minute I'd stare at the photo, the next I'd read your words again. Cool!

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  3. Tumblewords:13 December 2011 at 14:46

    This is one of my favorites!

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  4. Wayne Pitchko13 December 2011 at 19:19

    love what u have written here.....thanks for sharing

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  5. Brian Miller13 December 2011 at 19:36

    i like the hope i feel left with in the end...nicely done...

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  6. Charles Miller13 December 2011 at 20:57

    I really enjoy poems that take on the cosmic.

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  7. Claudia13 December 2011 at 21:04

    nice...love the pulsating elements and these last lines are just superb and leaves the reader with a glimpse of hope

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  8. Nimue14 December 2011 at 01:04

    wow !! totally surreal :)

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  9. Dave King14 December 2011 at 01:14

    I could feel this as I read it. Well done.

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  10. :-Dee14 December 2011 at 05:04

    You have a way with words and I really loved this poem and the mystic picture that so aptly goes with it. Very well written and expressed. clap clap!! :)

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  11. Traci B14 December 2011 at 06:54

    Excellent poem. I especially like the line "I watch the boat take away my hubris." Very creative use of the wordle, and so fitting for the image.

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  12. Mary Mansfield14 December 2011 at 12:19

    beautiful poem!

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  13. flaubert14 December 2011 at 16:28

    As always beautiful verse, Gautami.

    Pamela

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  14. Celestial Dreamz16 December 2011 at 07:37

    such a brilliant take ... loved it.

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  15. Ravenblack16 December 2011 at 16:37

    I can see that. Very uplifting, releasing one's cares to it, letting it go. Well written. :)

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  16. sharplittlepencil16 December 2011 at 21:25

    Wow! Watching the boat (symbol of wealth and status in larger vessels) taking away his greed and sin. I simply loved this, Gautami. Thank you for including the link on my blog! Peace, Amy
    http://sharplittlepencil.wordpress.com/2011/12/15/too-close-no-comfort/

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  17. Sheila (Bookjourney)17 December 2011 at 10:21

    I love this ... very moving.

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  18. nan18 December 2011 at 07:38

    I like the idea of a boat taking away one's hubris. Very nice write.

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  19. Kim Nelson18 December 2011 at 10:03

    So esoteric!

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  20. Jingle Poetry At The Gooseberry Garden19 December 2011 at 23:13

    Merry Christmas and Happy New Year.

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  21. HyperCRYPTICal22 December 2011 at 04:17

    A lovely write.

    Anna :o]

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