Sunday, 6 June 2010

incomplete yet so replete

In day's last light
he moved very quietly
hidden behind her

hidden from moon
his non-existent shadows
spooked her out

out came her arms
to protect her facade
and hit him instead

hit by her
he fell on ground
embracing it

sweet earthy embrace
took him in
held him like a lover

earth as his beloved
he kissed it passionately
needing none other
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14 comments:

  1. Ramesh Sood6 June 2010 at 10:08

    Don't have words to express, just one thing.. amazing lines..

    sweet earthy embrace
    took him in
    held him like a lover

    Thoughts.. you have a way to express Gautami..

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  2. SOL6 June 2010 at 14:48

    I like the flow and rhythm of this poem.

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  3. Stan Ski6 June 2010 at 16:51

    She certainly brought him down to earth!

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  4. Zouxzoux6 June 2010 at 17:30

    I love the feeling of this poem - sweet, sensual and earthy.

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  5. Lorraine7 June 2010 at 03:21

    Now that is what I call falling in love, need I say it: I LOVE IT ;)

    and the word verification is perfect for your version of love:
    BRITIAL
    instead of
    bridal
    because it needs the T of a BRUTE

    and I know you get this :)

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  6. Julia Smith7 June 2010 at 09:07

    I love how the imagery of each stanza gets flipped into something new for the next one. Really love this one, Gautami!

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  7. Kuyerjudd8 June 2010 at 00:18

    Such beautiful poetry that seems to just flow easily. Good job!

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  8. Dina Spice8 June 2010 at 05:09

    I love how he didn't get what he wanted, but embraced what he ended up with anyway.

    The Rolling Stones..."you can't always get what you want, but you get what you need" played through my head after reading this.

    - Dina

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  9. M.L. Gallagher8 June 2010 at 05:44

    Yeah! I too like how he didn't get what he wanted but embraced what he got and loved it.

    I linked in from Carry on Tuesdays -- lovely finding your words here!

    Louise

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  10. Jim8 June 2010 at 06:10

    Yikes! Death to the villian?
    You worked hard on this one.

    Mine is at the link above.
    ..

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  11. angie8 June 2010 at 08:07

    these lines stand out for me --

    hidden from moon
    his non-existent shadows

    great poem!

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  12. naramalone.com8 June 2010 at 13:54

    Loved these lines:

    earth as his beloved
    he kissed it passionately
    needing none other

    Beautiful poem!

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  13. Missy8 June 2010 at 19:10

    This one had me searching for that meaning, and I think I found it. I love how you're able to take inanimate and give it life, breathing existence into your pieces.

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  14. flaubert9 June 2010 at 08:04

    beautiful flow!
    Pamela

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