Thursday, 12 November 2009

skin dreams



so you sleep so peacefully
uncaring that I watch you
those eye lids moving along
with your tremulous dreams
your nose flaring a bit
the rise and fall of your chest
I subtly put my ears to it
picking up your heart beat
I sway to the rhythm of it
I steady myself and
my palms slide over you
your skin seeps ecstasy
into mine. closing my eyes
I join you in your dreams
adding some of my own..
Posted by at
Labels: , , , ,

19 comments:

  1. Triptoes12 November 2009 at 04:43

    Like this one.A tender gentle love poem.

    ReplyDelete
  2. sage12 November 2009 at 05:19

    A touching and beautiful poem

    ReplyDelete
  3. Cynthia Short12 November 2009 at 05:22

    So lovely, and I like the way you took the prompt in another direction, very imaginative!

    ReplyDelete
  4. Linda12 November 2009 at 06:24

    Simply soft and satisfying. Your poem is wonderful. Thank you Gautami.

    ReplyDelete
  5. anthonynorth12 November 2009 at 07:12

    Beautifully done.

    ReplyDelete
  6. Zouxzoux12 November 2009 at 07:55

    So sweet...it gives me a warm feeling.

    ReplyDelete
  7. Derrick12 November 2009 at 08:05

    Hi Gautami,

    A lovely, intimate moment before sharing your dreams.

    ReplyDelete
  8. Anonymous12 November 2009 at 11:33

    from Therese L. Broderick -- I love how you remind us that dreams are not all mental static -- dreams are a physical phenomenon, a bodily state (like love is, too). I love the movement in this poem from distant observer to skin toucher to participant in the dream.

    ReplyDelete
  9. Paul Oakley12 November 2009 at 11:43

    Gautami, I like your take on dream poetry from the outside, observing the dreamer, intimately, joining the dreamer imaginatively. Nice!

    ReplyDelete
  10. davidmoolten12 November 2009 at 13:11

    I like the multiple dreams occurring here, the unseen dreams of the sleeper perceived through body movements, the dreamy narrative, and the joining of the narrator and the dreamer.

    ReplyDelete
  11. Lawrence Gladeview12 November 2009 at 14:27

    "your skin seeps ecstasy into mine" a wonderful arrangement gautami, gives an excellent notion of warmth and sweat. enjoyed this serene setting.
    -lawrence

    ReplyDelete
  12. RBroeker12 November 2009 at 15:09

    Watching and touching somebody in his sleep can be so romantic and moving. But it can also be something very unwanted ... I think, this one has many layers.

    Best wishes
    Ralf

    ReplyDelete
  13. Wayne Pitchko12 November 2009 at 23:05

    I find this very warm Gautami....thanks for this

    ReplyDelete
  14. Elizabeth Westmark13 November 2009 at 18:24

    After living with my love for so many years, I find your words very evocative of my own experiences. Now, sometimes, in the middle of the night, I stay awake to be absolutely sure I am hearing those treasured inhalations and exhalations.

    ReplyDelete
  15. Irene14 November 2009 at 23:19

    I like..

    the rise and fall of your chest
    I subtly put my ears to it

    ReplyDelete
  16. Tamra14 November 2009 at 23:31

    Hi Gautami - This is so gentle and intimate. What a beautiful job you have done.

    ReplyDelete
  17. Jeeves16 November 2009 at 20:21

    This sure would be interesting dreams

    ReplyDelete
  18. Quiet Paths19 November 2009 at 12:06

    Delicately sensual and beautifully penned.

    ReplyDelete
  19. swapnap21 November 2009 at 09:27

    Liked the flow from watching to then being a part of it..too good Gautami.

    ReplyDelete

Subscribe to: Post Comments (Atom)