I know it is not a ballad but it does have a story!
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strolling in the graveyard
with roses in my hand,
along with the fog rolling in
for her tryst with sin;
a banshee screams,
in my nightmarish dream.
deeply in love with dracula’s daughter
creatures of darkness
what music they make.
life in the night, most don't know;
lives in the shadows, which light throws.
terror runs deep where murkiness falls,
thirst never quenched from hunger’s call.
deeply in love with dracula's daughter
never could fathom
in my wildest dreams.
life has its own course, it now seems
it follows only its own whims.
I cannot but help whom I love;
I cannot help that she thrives on blood.
deeply in love with dracula’s daughter
unmindful of what others think,
I trudge along towards my queen,
our nuptials to be held on halloween.
I look forward to good times ahead
but vampires in love with her, are sad
as I would be calling dracula, dad.
deeply in love with dracula's daughter
the very thought of her
love-bites after twilight;
her scratching nails all through the night
her bloody kisses just before dawn,
her writhing body against my own,
just stop short of driving me wild.
deeply in love with dracula's daughter
This could almost be a song lyric, Gautami. It's got that good rhythm to it. (why is the ballad important? Are you writing for a prompt?)
ReplyDeleteBeing in love with a vampire is sexy, yet sad, because we don't live in the same world! Pretty poem, Gautami
ReplyDeleteoooh, I've always liked dark poems. this has a speed to it, too. I like it!
ReplyDeleteGhost of a rose!
ReplyDeleteI agree with the remarks above about these being good song lyrics! It makes me think of Buffy the Vampire Slayer, too, a favorite series. I like the repeating refrain of "deeply in love with dracula's daughter."
ReplyDeleteThis is fun, fun, fun! Nuptuials on halloween etc.. Dead good!
ReplyDeleteThat last stanza is my favorite -- I like this a lot.
ReplyDeleteI like, I like, I like! Seems your foray into darkness is producing some spectacular work!
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A power ballad then, like Guns&Roses.
ReplyDeleteGreat work. :)
I loved reading this one, and it is perfect with the drawing.
ReplyDelete'her bloody kisses just before dawn,
ReplyDeleteher writhing body against my own,
just stop short of driving me wild.'
Ooo! Shivery! With delight. I love it.
I don't why, I find this amusing but perhaps it's not meant to be written that way? I don't know, I like the rhyming and the way perspective groom somehow has a sense of humor and yet desires this vampire so much that even death doesn't seem to concern him, and the part of calling Dracula dad? clever!
ReplyDeleteLyrical and flowing. I really like it!
ReplyDelete"Love bites after twilight..." beautiful, gautami! Very nice!
ReplyDeleteI'm seeing Bela Lugosi in drag. Actually, there's a pretty good movie called "Dracula's Daughter." I forget the name of the actress who plays the title role.
ReplyDeleteThis is a delightful read. Good rhythm and strong repeating line. Nuptials on Halloween, very clever. Nice job. Have a nice day.
ReplyDeleteNext time you think you've lost the muse, just think what delights you've yet to write once you've rested :-)
ReplyDeleteYou're coming back with real style.
oh, i love this. calling dracula dad is very clever.
ReplyDeleteWhat a wonderful poem. Today must be Dracula day. Devourer of Books published a review of The Dracula Dossier.
ReplyDeleteooh, this is great, the rhythm and all...
ReplyDeleteThis one begs to be read aloud I think, with an appropriately spooky sounding voice! And yes, it has a great, driving rhythm!
ReplyDeleteWell done!
Cool, a very original idea for a poem and very well executed.
ReplyDeletethis has it all: imagery, rhythm, alliteration and rhyme and story to boot. I don't know what makes a ballad but I can practically hear this set to music. oh and see the music video too.
ReplyDeletevery well done
romantic image and ballad!
ReplyDeleteinteresting rhyme scheme!
i like how the lover is thinking it through (drac as dad?) yet moving forward to do the wild thing! shows the passion
A truly romantic tale, and addictive too.
ReplyDeleteFiendishly funny in a dark kind of way.
ReplyDeleteI'm sitting here chuckling at your imagination and thankful for it!
ReplyDeleteYou writing carries such a wonderful dark humor that is helped along by the rhyme.
ReplyDeleteAnd you're back in full form and with a tale to tell! This is delicious!
ReplyDeleteThe repetition works great here, gautami! Full of pathos and humor, the best kind of monster tales. Great stuff.
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