A new writing forum ,Writers Island for tuesday posts, was started by Rob Kistner. The inaugural prompt for this week is My Imaginary Life to write poetry, stories etc. Hope it fills that vacuum which has been created by closure of Poetry Thursday. This is my first offering for that Island which belongs to writers!
Fantasizing Ecstacy
through a
lopsided smirk
looped ears
dreadlocks dropping
down my back
I play the guitar.
half-closed eyes
trance-like state
unbidden passion
pours forth,
hitting a high
trouncing a low
with a flourish
I take a bow.
imagination had
triggered this fantasy.
euphoria woke me
up from ecstasy.
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It's about waking up! Nice poetry and response on your imaginary life!
ReplyDeleteHi Gautami! Cool image with the dreadlocks, half-closed eyes, and the smirk. I could hear the music too -- really nice. And I like the part about "euphoria woke me/ up from ecstasy" -- that's a fun line.
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That was a fun poem. I felt like swaying to the music as I read it.
ReplyDeleteSo you want to be a rock star Gautami... what a neat surprise! This was a very cool piece... ;)
ReplyDeleteThank you for becoming part of our island community. I look forward to seeing it grow.
Oh, I love the imagery here.
ReplyDeleteI love the imagery too. Enjoyed this.
ReplyDeleteI've always longed for the skill to express my soul through music.
ReplyDeleteGreat poem.
Hi!- Enjoyed this take on the prompt very much, especially the connections to music, which is integral to my soul.
ReplyDeleteThat sounds like fun! I like the idea of the bliss described in your poem.
ReplyDeleteYour words are so descriptive - I can almost see the guitarist, hear the music...Well done!
ReplyDeletemaybe you and rob should form a band!!!!!
ReplyDeleteHee hee- I was gonna say the same as Paisley! Wha a fun surprise!
ReplyDeleteThe last stanza was amazing. How you brought it out from the fantasy was perfect to my ears.
ReplyDeleteBeautiful music, great words!
ReplyDeleteSweet! And yes. Of course. :0)
ReplyDeleteFantastically imaginative!!
ReplyDeleteI could see Ravi Shankar in my minds eye. Although that would have been a sitar, not a guitar.
ReplyDeleteOh well, it works for me! Sounds great...
Blue
Wow - you captured that image so wonderfully. I was THERE. Awesome!
ReplyDeleteYes, this was a good imaginary life to have.
ReplyDeleteit's no fun to come back to reality... nice poem
ReplyDeletewords dancing... I sit entranced with the images you invoke... thank you!
ReplyDeleteThis was such fun!
ReplyDeleteI found it delightful picturing you in dreadlocks taking a bow. :)
ReplyDeleteWhat a wonderful poem! I especially enjoy the rhythm - quick and tumbling along each sensation. It so wonderfully expresses the single-minded enjoyment of each moment in bliss. Thank you so very much for the lovely experience that is your poem.
ReplyDeleteunexpected, evocative, and lovely...
ReplyDeleteAhh, to be totally immersed in the fantasy. I could totally related to that. This is very enjoyable. Wonderful. :)
ReplyDeletegautami,
ReplyDeleteThis piece and it's comment flow with perfect melody. The poem, the song, the dream blend into one. Excellant, Bravo my friend!
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Oh, well done! It's like a song in itself, with a beat and a rhythm.
ReplyDeleteAlex, I will take a trance like state for 200
ReplyDeleteWHAT IS Jamaica
Alex, reluctant emperor messiah for 300
WHO IS Ras Tafari
Will the Judges accept that?
Yes he was also known as Hailie Selasse
Yes OK..
OK Alex, I'll take hitting a high note for 400
WHO IS Bob Marley
gautami my friend,how hard hitting and powerful are your images and words.I loved this verse:
ReplyDelete"half-closed eyes
trance-like state
unbidden passion
pours forth,"
Beautiful work.
love-bd
Nicely done. Your poem paints such a clear image.
ReplyDeleteI am sorry you had to awaken from that esctasy! I really enjoyed this poem.
ReplyDeletei was right there with you, playing the guitar, at one with my music!
ReplyDeleteI do this sometimes with a violin. If I could just play the violin, I think I would be an awesome violinist!
ReplyDeleteALas.
Great fantasy life! I love it!
ReplyDeleteYes! Take a bow, lovely poem.
ReplyDeleteAnd thank you for your comment on my post. If you do see him around ask him what happens next!
Cool poem man, I do like da Islands.
ReplyDeletePeace out
Rose
xo
Morning Gautami, I love reggae and steel drum music. This brought me such a aural vision.
ReplyDeletean excellent portrait!
ReplyDeleteWe all have to wake up sometime, I guess. Waking from such euphoria is not so bad though.
ReplyDeleteNice image. Well done, Gautami. Always a pleasure.
i see her. thanks for writing about one of my fantasies! i too dreamed that i can play the guitar with "unbidden passion".
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