Ambiguous
Nine
Slept
tired, clasping non-descriptive
toy to her cheek, she slept
at last, when clock struck nine,
her world fallen apart. the epistle
had hit home taking all shine
from her. future was uncertain-
with most part being ambiguous
childhood no longer sustained.
in span of few hours, all was lost
her parents killed, her house blown
lifetime gone in mindless blast.
he watched her sleep, smoothing
her frowned brow, he smiled tenderly,
his hardened heart finally melting-
‘clutched his new daughter to heart’
at last, when clock struck nine,
ReplyDeleteher world fallen apart. the epistle
had hit home taking all shine from her
This is lovely, so lovely. I enjoyed your take....
loved this line
ReplyDeletethe epistle
had hit home taking all shine
from her.
gorgeous.
The ending brings closure to the poem.
ReplyDeletenicely done!
ReplyDeleteI feel somewhat guilty finding beauty in something so sad, but you did an excellent job with this. A tragic event.
ReplyDeleteSome great lines in here, for sure - nice take on this prompt!
ReplyDeleteI feel so small next to work like this.
ReplyDeleteNice piece, Guatami. So emotional, so moving.
very nicely executed. :)
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i like! =)
ReplyDeletesuch a sad truth... may none of us ever have to live with the realization that all we have ever known,,, is gone.....
ReplyDeletewow I have to say this has got to be one of my favorites...the emotion was just so raw...I love that someone was watching over her.
ReplyDeleteIt oozes emotion both sweet and bitter.
ReplyDeleteI'm very impressed by the poem that came out of your three-word prompt. Definitely has a raw emotion to it. Wonderful, Gautami.
ReplyDeleteNice. Beautiful.
ReplyDeleteBut please stop emailing me things like this:
as an afterthought
that reminds me, ennui setting in,
apparently, for no reason, I have been bored
with you of late.
you shameless lion you.
so sad and yet something beautiful to be found...
ReplyDeleteLove the way this reads, with all articles removed.
ReplyDeleteAnd I agree with Jo and Romancewriter about my favorite part.
she slept
ReplyDeleteat last, when clock struck nine,
her world fallen apart. the epistle
had hit home taking all shine
from her.
Beautiful, Gautami
What words can I leave here that everyone else before me hasn't already said? This is so sad, beautiful and happy all at once. You are truly a gifted writer.
ReplyDeleteMichelle Johnson
Hi Gautami! Devastating and heartbreaking about all the children who have lost parents and other family and friends due to "mindless blast". You wrote this so beautifully, and I was so relieved this little girl has a new home.
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Beautiful emotion... raw, bare, sad and through its honesty, true beauty. Love it.
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