Friday 7 October 2011

peripherals

you stand so aloof
yet the stillness of your body
throbs against my own

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I rub my chin
reflectively 
each pore of yours
is doorway to heaven

heaven I find
deep in your eyes
iris reflecting
I caress your spine

haunted by your scent
I house myself
in periphery
of my disintegration-
amalgamating into you

21 comments:

  1. agamal... amluga... Ha! I can't even read it correctly silently.

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  2. nice bit of word play in that last little bit...

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  3. Wow, this was beautiful and unexpected! Well Done~ I love how you did this :D

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  4. Really brings home the impulse to make the two one.

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  5. Like a chorus from the 1980's song: "I'll stop the world and melt with you."

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  6. These are beautiful and work as haiku in their unexpected juxtapositions. I think you'd be really good at writing tanka too. They use nature imagery to arrive at the same feelings of love and sensuality that you do here. Really well done!

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  7. Very nice work. Love the tone of the entire thing, but I also like how each piece evokes slightly different feelings. =)

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  8. Gautami....?
    That was HOT!!!
    I love this side of you
    Thanks for sharing
    Have a Kick Ass Week-End

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  9. Now Now! Now is not the time for tingles, is it triptoes? Fantastic poem...you excel in this genre.

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  10. A beautifully written and sensual piece of art....

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  11. immediately fell in love with the first one

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  12. sensual! this is what I pick up.
    each pore a portal to heaven...cool

    Your falling into it! there's no saving you; but, maybe you don't need to be saved....it just might be true heaven.

    your haiku and poem evokes those amorous feelings I house somewhere back in the recesses of my forgotten subconscious. Yes! I remember what it was like.
    And that's what you want...to arouse your reader...which you've done. good job. thanks.

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  13. so good - these are excellent

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  14. Beautiful and sensual poems. I love what you've done here.

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  15. very clever response, weaving so much

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  16. Nice use of the prompt, it's always fun using words in different ways isn't it?

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