Sunday 9 October 2011

alley and valley

music in my mind
flows into yours
intermingling both of us

love clutches my belly

I want to know why
the heart feels that flutter
while I learn you with my body

love clutches my belly

in the essence of you
I fall into overwhelming depths
to rise again to the fore

love clutches my belly

if it goes on like this
I will make that my banner
and post it in an alley

25 comments:

  1. very cool poem. I especially I like the closer.
    thanks.

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  2. this is cool :) I liked the refrain. It's true!

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  3. I love this, especially your first stanza.

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  4. while i learn you with my body evokes quite an intimate picture...

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  5. "while I learn you with my body".
    - a honest and fulfilling way to
    learn someone.

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  6. the thought of proclaiming your love in an alley...hmmmm...interesting.

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  7. make it your banner. i liked this very much:)

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  8. I love this. The repetition works well to enhance your message.

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  9. brilliant. this has the feel of a rumi. something exquisite and just slightly above the rails.
    your refrain is amazing and every word in between.
    very much appreciated this, this morning.

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  10. It beautiful exploration of love and commitment.

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  11. Beautiful poem. I love the first line especially then it just got better from there. Well done

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  12. You composed a great poem for Poetry Jam this week!

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  13. I love the repeat of "love clutches my belly." And "while I learn you with my body" is wonderful!

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  14. I especially love "I will make that my banner and post it in an alley."

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  15. what a great little poem. There seems to be a lot packed into a small space here, brilliant!

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  16. fascinating stuff!incisively insightful.

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  17. fascinating stuff!incisively insightful.

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  18. Beautifully done. I love the idea of the banner.

    Kay, Alberta, Canada
    An Unfittie’s Guide to Adventurous Travel

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  19. Lovely love poem. My favorite part is the last stanza :)

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  20. "love clutches my belly" really says it all. what a lovely line.

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  21. I hope you do make that banner and post it in the alley that would be great
    http://gatelesspassage.com/2011/10/10/the-bird-of-love/

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