Wednesday, 22 September 2010

remnants

in the remnants
I seek the aroma-
no, not yours.

into the skewed sky
it has wafted-
clouds are the witness.

I must get to it,
catch it, bottle it-
and throw it into a cavern

floorboards watch me,
each creak loud,
while I collect vacuum. 

25 comments:

  1. Hmmm... there are some smells that should just be bottled and kept, that of a lover well loved is one.

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  2. For me, this tells the tale of some twisted love that needs bottling to be discarded effectively! A most interesting piece of writing!

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  3. Very intense, second stanza is awesome I could feel the tension throughout!

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  4. I can think of a few smells I'd like to bottle. The smell of my boys hair after it's been washed, the way my man smells after he's taken a shower, and the way the air smells right before it rains.

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  5. very interesting piece as well i loved ur imagery here.. good work

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  6. The title is perfection. Love and Light, Sender

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  7. Such a powerful and well written poem...it is amazing...i love this one! :-)

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  8. If I could go back in time ... and capture the scents of my loves .... oh well, maybe it's best I can't! Nicely written ...

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  9. mysterious and secretive and you have hidden for yourself...nice write...bkm

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  10. Intriguing and provocative. Your words soar with a mystical, magical sourcing.

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  11. There are some things we just can't lose..nice and a bit of mystery!

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  12. Interesting take for Acqua di Parma. I must go to my local Sephora to see if this one should be kept in a vacuum.

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  13. For me this speaks of the frantic ways we want to hang onto lost love. The memory of a scent can be a tangible thing. Nice!

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  14. Chasing scent or rainbows? Both are equally elusive. I loved this bottled Magpie.

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  15. I really love the second stanza, beautiful poetry.

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  16. Nice images. A little sad. Loved your Magpie. Here's my Sweet Sucess.

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  17. i love that last stanza...between the floorboards and the vaccum there is just something about it that says so much..nice magpie!

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  18. love this one... felt like cloud wafting across the sky, searching for that found scent one is longing for.

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  19. 'throw it into a cavern' - is this to save it or to get rid of it, I wonder?
    Great Magpie.

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  20. Ah - the beautiful and mysterious link of smell and memory. Something to capture forever. Loved this Magpie.

    Mine is up.

    PG

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  21. Enigmatic last stanza. I like it!

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