Wednesday 23 September 2009

let my poemlette take you on

let that eclipse languish
in its own place of choosing
I will take a detour
increasing my velocity
I was never asked
why should I be a part of it
mere objects those,
I am alive & I thrive
this rambling will go one
if I don't stop it

here I leave loose ends for you
to decide what path to take
isn't it true, we like to choose
let my poemlette take you on
while I do take a detour

15 comments:

  1. simply beautiful. And inspiring. Thanks.

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  2. Very deep write.. Beautifuly penned.

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  3. There are many layers to that one.

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  4. Your pieces continue to inspire me thank you.

    http://wordvamp.wordpress.com/2009/09/23/an-offering-for-death/

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  5. The second part was equally powerful as the first.
    "here I leave loose ends for you
    to decide what path to take
    isn't it true, we like to choose".
    I liked these the most.

    an eye for an eye makes the whole world blind

    ~Harsha

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  6. That was just awesome! the best ever... :)

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  7. I look forward to your writings every week!

    This was no exception.

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  8. My favorite part:

    "I was never asked
    why should I be a part of it"

    This is a common theme of modern life.

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  9. Very powerful. I like the "loose ends" line.

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  10. "leave loose ends for you..." was such a nice usage.Enjoyed reading this one.

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  11. Another breathtaking piece gautami, very powerful and thought provoking. Why is it that we are not asked more often whether or not we want to be a part of something?

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  12. Nicely done. I like the last line, hinting that we don't all have to be inspired down the same path.

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  13. I'm struck by the way this seems to be a rambling stream of consciousness. At the same time, it could be a very cleverly constructed piece...
    The message is great.
    The Moment Before Impact

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