Friday 4 September 2009

I hold myself to the doorway

I stay in this dreamy cottage
each of its rooms brings surprises
I hold myself to the doorway
rubbing that tarnished key
I find no lock fit its contours

the mirage of you propels me
to walk through that closed door
I know you didn't leave
any trace of your intentions
you wish to remain exiled in that forest

in my palm, that key fills a void
I romance it, skillfully manipulating it

39 comments:

  1. I like this, especially the ending - although I shouldn't really say that, it all flows together so well.

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  2. "I find no lock to fit its contours". This is skillfully written and emotionally vibrant poetry.

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  3. Dreamy cottage...each room... full of surprises....well thats a wonderful image!

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  4. the last two lines.. magnificent!
    wonderful!

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  5. GT: Your title and this are gems:

    the mirage of you propels me...

    Best to you.

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  6. Beautiful images, but why did I think about the Bluebeard tales when reading about a key and doors?

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  7. I love the line "I romance it." It is a great way to end it. Well done!

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  8. I love this. Thank you for sharing!

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  9. Last two lines are very good

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  10. I really enjoyed this..my feeling was there was no cottage, you were talking about places in your mind - and memories. The key symbolizes things in your memory you want to keep hidden...?

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  11. Very well done. I love the imagery!

    ~Saoirse

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  12. The key fills the role of a Teddy Bear for him. Similar to the child's during a crisis to bring stabilization I'm thinking.
    Or a pacifier.
    ..

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  13. Romance as a mystery place. You could unlock anything...

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  14. Intense, controlled emotion here! And there is quite a hidden agenda to romancing the key! Beautiful!

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  15. I love the subtle flow of each line to the next. Nice work with the prompt Gautami, I enjoyed reading this work.

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  16. a very important key indeed! :)

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  17. Haunting poem, held by a memory, beautifully done.

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  18. Life is full of many rooms we can open. Often times it only takes a key to open that door and create a new possibility. Great imagery, nicely done.

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  19. Ah, but how to enter, and when will the beloved return! Such questions make me think of the early days of intense romance. Beautifully done.

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  20. Loved this and the title - speaks of hesitation, anticipation, and a host of other "ations"

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  21. The last two lines are brilliant!!

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  22. There's such a yearning presence in this romantic poem...beautiful!

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  23. wonderful idea of romancing a key that opens the door to ones next step, the continuing of a journey.
    Spirithelpers

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  24. This leaves me feeling curious ~ I want to know who you're talking about! Great piece!

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  25. Leaves a lot to the imagination ... I need a key like that!

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  26. i get a sense of hesitancy to cross a threshold in your words...very poignent use of a tangible object for something intangible

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  27. the mirage of you left me suspended in air...what a beautiful piece...

    Novel

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  28. Beautifully written, emotional, sweet.

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  29. A lovely romantic piece - mysterious, mystical, full of magic and wonder. Nice!

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  30. Stay a while inside the cottage, touching the walls of the rooms. You don't have to leave. the key is your talisman, a warm stone in your palm.
    Beautiful, wistful, strong and deep.

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  31. As always Tami, this is lovely.My favorite lines are:
    "in my palm, that key fills a void
    I romance it, skillfully manipulating it" It leaves such a dreamy image in my mind.
    Well done.

    love-Melanie-bhd

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  32. "I stay in this dreamy cottage
    each of its rooms brings surprises"- I loved those lines and I want to be in THAT cottage! Beautifully haunting and ah- yes, those keys- some fit, some don't and some do need manipulating, don't they...

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