Saturday 24 January 2009

phantasmagoria

in the middle of a hot summer night,
moon behind the cloud sheds orange light,
dancing fireflies are in a perpetual flight

tired, harried and hungry I arrive alone,
looking for a place to rest my tired bones
midst of nowhere, I see a house of stone

eerie silence permeates the surroundings
the sudden stroke of the clock enhancing
the hush. massive clouds above roaming

like phantoms playing without any care-
within walls, shadows have stillness to share
some unknown force beckons me into that lair

out of nowhere opens up a massive door
my legs giveaway, I fall down on cold floor
all my thoughts are on my body so sore

tentacles of what I know not, hit my heart
sweepingly seeping red fluid break it apart
to carry my deathless body they need a cart

16 comments:

  1. "shadows have stillness to share"... for an unknown reason these words still resonate in me.

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  2. This gave me goosebumps! You really evoke the scariness! And I like the rhyme!

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  3. Oh, I do love a good touch of horror.

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  4. Wow - this one is full of anxiety and panic (but that doesn't mean I don't like it, far from it!) I've been meaning to ask you this, if you care to explain (don't have to of course) - the reason you incorporate italics into your work. It makes it visually interesting, but I was wondering beyond that, how you determined which lines or phrases to single out this way.

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  5. I really enjoyed the rhythm, narrative, and tone. The "shadows" line is particularly memorable.

    I am also interested in your use of italics.

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  6. i love the tone of this piece. very somber.

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  7. "a house of stone" is such an vivid image of cold, setting the scene and tone for this metaphorical tale.

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  8. Chilling, atmospheric - almost(or maybe) a nightmare.

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  9. like a scene in a horror movie. and i always enjoy reading / watching scary stuffs :-)

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  10. Oh my gosh, so ghastly, yet gorgeously written! You had me at the first line and I held my breath...

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  11. Painful, these phantoms. Nice writing, vivid imagery that chills and scares.

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  12. Oh, those shadows and seeping red fluids! powerful and haunting

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  13. Love this one - and great title too!


    Hey, today's prompt at MEME EXPRESS is PHANTOM.

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    Blessings,
    Linda

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