Wednesday 28 January 2009

digging doggedly

ruthless icicles in the deep freeze
caress other water molecules
which coalesce into each other

jagged ice act like sharp knives
digging doggedly into the edges
of molten space of my silence

psychedelic colours of which can
permeate some unknown vacuum
dreams dance their way through it

each jagged step ruthlessly caress
ramifications of which i know not

18 comments:

  1. I like it. It is thought-provoking and the images are fresh and crisp.

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  2. Brings shivers to me. It's been cold here the past week although warm today again.

    I like the 'taste' of this poem.

    Rose

    xo

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  3. It's a great poem, love the 'digging doggedly' feel of those words.

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  4. i like it! i like how you've made personalities out of the ice, water molecules, icicles, etc. great use of words.

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  5. Words are beautifully woven.

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  6. Molten space!!!!Nice one!!!!

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  7. I enjoyed this very much, it's chilling but compassionate...and thanks for not being angry at my comment :)

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  8. amusing... u take the readers deep...

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  9. Nice movement from ice to dreams and back...

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  10. We both wrote about icicles...how 'cool'. :P

    Your imagery was crystal clear...

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  11. you certainly have a uique way of seeing things...

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  12. I like how you use each word twice! I had a hard time getting "ruthless" in even once!

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  13. This poem has wonderful images. I really liked the sudden lines about light and how well it relates to the rest of the images in the poem.

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  14. Great piece!
    Love the "frozen" images!

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  15. cannot help but to compare... looking out a window watching long icicles slowing melt drenching the ground below... love "...the ramifications of which i do not know.."

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