Now I really enjoyed this one......
That was an interesting read...Nice compilation...Have a nice evening.. cheers...
You're getting deeper and deeper. Excellent.
I don't know which lines are your own here, but the last two lines, whether "yours" or not, are beautifully placed.
• very well knit• smooth resolution• fine work
Heavy thoughts sending my own to splinterts! A go.d job!:)
The title is wonderful! And the poem is powerful.
"...ribbons of her thoughtstie her down." Nice!
wow, you did a great job making sense with these lines. "the line of her lipscurves into the morning" is just a gorgeous image!
yes...I can really relate to this one...it definitely shows some of my layers...great job!
Lots of images jump out of the words.
if she carries enough chips ...Finally dawned on me what this means!Very cool.
I really like the way "soul's duality" is echoed by the image of her lips.
You did a great job finding your own poem in the mix of lines. I like the hopeful ending.
gautami -this was a wonderful piece... ;)
Beautiful. Full of the ambiguity of being human.
I really like this one!
The wisdom in here staggers me, lady. Nicely done!(I especially love the chips being too heavy to hold... that stanza's amazing)
this works very well
This is lovely.There are lots of wonderful lines in this poem. I enjoyed reading this.Also, thank you kindly for visiting my poetry journal!Cheers!http://alotus-poetry.livejournal.com
Love the way you fitted this all together, cool as a cucumber!