Wednesday 29 October 2008

numbing the senses senseless



within the ruined castle
behind the colossal pillars
silhouettes on the walls
come alive in the middle
of a dark moonless night

misted glass twist to a timeless
dance of whorling thoughts
making one feel palpable
time lurks in its confines,
standing to a sudden stillness

seeing an apparition coming
out of the opposite wall, I scream
resonance of which tears my ears
icy wind blows out of nowhere
numbing the senses senseless

scared I turn and run, slipping over
I fall into a deep bottomless crypt,
where snakes make a grand feast of me
all that remains are my bones, my soul
having merged with ghosts of past era

23 comments:

  1. I think many are running scared right now, or plunging themselves into the depths.

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  2. A good sense of the gothic in this. Excellent.

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  3. its very dark being scared creates its own depths of darkness!

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  4. This id too scary!
    It's like a nightmare I had once...

    Well done!

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  5. "...misted glass twist to a timeless dance of whorling thoughts."

    Wow - I can read so many different things in this one line! Great job!

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  6. I love how much attention you paid to sounds in your poem. I really hope this isn't some sort of gloomy interpretation of our election process!

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  7. dark and rhythmic...love the sounds and imagery...!

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  8. it becomes more and more physical then ethereal!

    i can hear this one ringing in my head...

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  9. well, at least you won't be alone
    he he

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  10. Great offering for this weeks write. I love the chills I got.

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  11. i hate to dream this dream..very scary !!!!

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  12. Gautami --

    Very, very creepy, and the snakes were so crawly... I hate snakes!

    A ghoulish and grand tale! ;)

    ...rob

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  13. "where snakes make a grand feast of me"

    Gee giving snakes a bad name!

    brilliant work!

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  14. very appropriate for the Halloween season!

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  15. dance of whorling thoughts

    brilliant

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  16. Very gothic. I like the "whorling thoughts."

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  17. It's like a dream, and yet, as a Jewish mystical teacher Rabi Nahman once said: made into a story, a dream is no longer just a dream...

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  18. The drama keeps coming in this one! There is almost a breathless sense of horror! Part of the fear is that the nightmare is way out of control! Enjoyed this!

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  19. A superlative piece, as usual. Love the vivid, dark imagery. Very well-penned!

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  20. visiting your blog for the first time.
    very interesting. a haunting image, well worked out.
    have bookmarked you.

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  21. dark and scary... but a good one!

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