Saturday 18 October 2008

dilemma

Here I offer two short verses, both different from my style!:

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you ask to follow me?

never! ending this
unhealthy liason now

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in the abyss of darkness
where black holes absorb
all that they can, he got lost-
momentarily
blinded by it

yet he senses it has to end
nothing ever is never ending

42 comments:

  1. Yeah!

    I love this poem!

    Thanks for the delight and the smile of recognition. Yes, that is how it happens. Between words, between breaths, you know!

    Thank you for the great prompt.

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  2. Thank You for an excellent Prompt!
    Theses vereses are excellent, I can relate to both very well.

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  3. I agree they are both very nice! but I like the second one best.

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  4. very nice verses indeed.
    "nothing ever is never ending"... how I love this one!

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  5. You are full of surprises! Not your style at all, but brilliant nonetheless.

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  6. Nicely done. Shame they had to end.

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  7. I like that second one!
    Thank you for the prompt.

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  8. Really nice one. The first one.

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  9. To be lost temporarily in a black hole is an intense idea. I feel the crushing pressure of all and nothing at once!

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  10. All kinds of interesting interpretations in this one. Well done!

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  11. Maybe not your style but I enjoyed them both. :)

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  12. You never fail to surpise and amaze me! These are both short but deep!

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  13. Hi Gautami, these are very different.

    A nice twist to the prompt!

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  14. An interesting hypotheses, but has anything ever come out from within a black hole? At least yet?

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  15. ..thank u for a very interesting prompt and equally interesting interpretations..

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  16. Great prompt Gautami, thank you.

    I love your interpretations of it here. Well done!

    www.mypoeticpath.wordpress.com

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  17. waking
    from a dream
    the sudden darkness

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  18. Thanks for the prompt this week. I really like the second poem-- very nice.

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  19. Thanks for your great prompt this week. I was surprised at your offering - I loved it.

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  20. thank you for the prompt this week...i like your twist on this, particularly the idea that 'nothing is never ending'

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  21. Your prompt and haiku was just wonderful. As is this one.

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  22. I like that, "nothing is ever never ending." Thank you.

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  23. Hi Guatami!

    I just came by to check out some of your entries from the past several weeks. I learned a new word from you "tatterdemalion" - that's a great word!

    I haven't been around, I've been working too hard. Is there no more Monday Poetry Train?

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  24. so witty especially the first

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  25. I so love the sparse nature of these two pieces Gautami -- especially the second piece. Powerfully minimal, yet it immerses you instantly and deeply in its rich essence.

    "nothing ever is never ending" the mantra of the material world... ;)

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  26. I'm still perplexed as to why they took the N out of DilemNa...
    how rude!

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  27. These are great - zen and wise!

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  28. Wanting an end to things that will inevitably end anyway - perhaps the sentiment of wishing for 'forever' will last forever.

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  29. As Usual I didnt understand a bloody thing!

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  30. Love the prompt, and your excellent twist on the take. Your second poem is marvelous as well.

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  31. Your work is always intriguing to me.

    Today I am stopping in from Writer's Island.

    I enjoyed both poems but I really found myself drawn to the last line in the second one. It makes me think.

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  32. Liked these two too, Gautami!
    wishes!
    devika

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  33. Thanks for your kind comment on my blog! and it is nice to known that you care and teach these children.
    It is also nice what you said about India I have found that many of the best blogs are run by people in India. My father was in India before independence.

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  34. excellent! short verses always have bigger impacts. I loved them.

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  35. Something very different from you. Nice one.

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  37. If there is a beginning, an ending is definitely somewhere out there. The law of life is polarity. Otherwise existence is but void.

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