Thursday 10 July 2008

tears trickle slowly


tears trickle slowly
down the cheeks
when I raise my fingers
to wipe those away
I find not a single drop

clogging the throat
all the more potent
for being unshed

least they could do
to fall in torrents
cleansing the debris
washing away
my inner torment







Photo:
Rick Mobbs

19 comments:

  1. very evocative... especially the idea of putting up a finger and finding no tears there.

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  2. the way you've written this reminds me of the herky-jerky hiccuping one makes when trying not to cry...

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  3. Oh, this is so true! I love the way you worded it!

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  4. There's been too many tears falling.

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  5. Yeah, there's something about unshed tears and torment - nice one..

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  6. dripping with emotion. love it!

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  7. This really hurts. You do well sharing the emotion. :)

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  8. This suggests searching, to me. The torment an unknowing.

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  9. so much suffering... excellent!

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  10. It's the unshed tears that do the worst damage.


    Awesome write.

    -Nicole

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  11. This makes me catch my breath and feel a lump myself.

    One minor critique, if you don't mind. I'm not sure it needs the last line. I understood that sentiment without it being stated explicitly.

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  12. the photo goes so well with the poem - great work!

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  13. its certainly the unshed ones that are the hardest...

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  14. Definitely a tormented soul. Lovely work.

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  15. love how you reacted/wrote abt the painting...

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