Friday, 5 October 2007

Fallen angels!-----[Fiction] Friday



[Fiction] Friday Challenge for October, 5 2007:
Use the first line of a nursery rhyme (your choice) to start your own story.

Jack and Jill went up the hill to fetch a pail of water

born on the same day
inseparable since birth
both always had a say

about what went on in
the other’s life. toddler
days were not to be seen

for sometime now, even
childhood was left behind
adolescent feelings driven

to core. hormones bubbled
jumping forth. unfamiliar it
was too. step that stumbled

was no surprise. climbing hill
was but only an excuse. dread
after the deed added to thrill

to escape from parent's fury
they fell and faked self-injury!

14 comments:

  1. Gautami, you have a sly way of getting your point across. ;)

    Rose

    xo

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  2. very crafty... if the deed is what i think it was......

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  3. That's great, Gautami! How on Earth do you come up with such sly works?

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  4. kind of fun reading this. Nice job.

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  5. You were so clever with this one. Guess your writers block is over!

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  6. i like this gautami. from half of a twin, i can understand this so well. =)

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  7. Nursery rhymes have much more to them than tha meets th eye. I just want o highlight that aspect!

    Thanks!

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  8. ohhh... another story behind the story
    great!

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  9. love what you did with this :)

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  10. I've decided that when I have children, they will be banned from having any nursery rhymes. At least until they are 18...

    A cunning take on the rhyme - a lot of tumbling seems to go on for Jack & Jill...

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  11. Very creative! Enjoyed this one.

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  12. twins? oh interesting; i always assumed they were bf/gf; wishing I had the ability to write like you!

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