she sews holes
but the wholes never come into being
purple juice of grapes
spurt from her lips; stain her pristine dress
she outlines it lovingly
her doubts reflect in the walled mirror
faith is so fragile
hence she has no use of it now, nor ever
her feet disappear in water
her head sways sideways and upwards
I uncurl my mind around her-
I am not the only one. I know I stand in line.
The last line was so strong - left me feeling sad yet I could slo feel the strength and resilience of the voice..Jae
ReplyDeleteI love the first two lines, "she sews holes..." Lovely, quite visually evocative.
ReplyDeleteReally like the whole of this poem. Especially the line about uncurling mind around her, and makes the last line even more emphatic.
ReplyDeleteElizabeth
I love this..."I know I stand in line."
ReplyDeleteb
Powerful words & imagery. I loved the last line, too, and wondered if ...I am not the only one...could be deleted for the most powerful...I stand in line...just a thought...
ReplyDeletei love the first two lines - sewing holes - creates that hopeless feeling - but so beautiful
ReplyDeletemine is here
I liked it. made me sad and pensive. but that is what good poetry does...makes you think and I know the world is not always happy.
ReplyDeleteYou always end the poem with a line that lingers in mind for a long time..excellent..
ReplyDeleteWonderfully written.
ReplyDeleteI love the thinking behind this poem, and the use of holes/wholes.
ReplyDeleteLast line great.
gautami this is a beautiful piece!
ReplyDeletePamela
This was an excellent use of the cot prompt. I enjoyed the way it made me ponder. Thank you for sharing.
ReplyDeleteHow I love your poetry Gautami.
ReplyDeleteLovely to see that you are still writing here.
hugs for you
you are a star !!!
ReplyDeletefaith is so fragile
ReplyDeletehence she has no use of it now, nor ever
Sadly beautiful all the way through.
excellent poem! the last line stays in your head, really lingers. thanks for posting!
ReplyDeleteoplI like this one also glad you stopped by and left your comment I appreciate them very much ... Larry
ReplyDeleteVery powerful, especially the ending. Good Job
ReplyDeleteI read this again and again and I wonder. Thank you.
ReplyDeleteyou have a beautiful opening,
ReplyDeletevery smooth flow,
divine job!
I am not the only one. I know I stand in line.
ReplyDeletenice ending Cheers!!!
I love the flow of your poem, it is great, thank for sharing it=D
ReplyDeleteGreat opening. I need to read it again.
ReplyDeleteOh absolutely, Gautami! We are all in that line.. deeds/mistakes/reactions/love/faith are all part of life.. and eventually, we reflect - curling and uncurling indeed!
ReplyDeleteBeautifully portrayed! I enjoyed the wordplay here.. very stylishly played!
Thanks for sharing this fine poem with poetry potluck...it's a pleasure to have you here!