I had carried it for long
everywhere I went
it was with me
I cherished it
pampered it
loved flaunting it
even when it almost faded
it had become a part of me
the very thought of letting go scared me
then I recognized the truth,
surrounding me,
it took pieces off me
a parasite feeding greedily,
I gave it a big shove-
it fell away, leaving me free;
splinters of pensive thought
lay scattered on hard ground
"it deserved the hard coldness too"
As ever Gautami..an extra ordinary write..this.. yes, it happens.. and wish everyone could have the courage like you..
ReplyDeleteHave put up my 99th post.. a Haiku.. do visit in the evening to bless the 100th one too..
Attachment is always soothing,but detachment is a blessing. Excellent.
ReplyDeleteTami, your nice poem reminded me of the trophy wife. (Google that)
ReplyDeleteThey cling and are support but really they aren't doing the kind of favor that a man needs. It works with women too, I think we call these ladies Cougars.
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"I gave it a big shove-it fell away, leaving me free"
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Superb.
ah yes, it takes a while sometime to recognize a parasite.. u did right, giving it a shove and getting free..!
ReplyDeleteStrange how something we feel is a treasure, can actually be feeding a dark need! Recognise this insidious entity, and then it's right to let it go!
ReplyDeleteThere is so much truth to this. Often what we cherish the most is the worst for us.
ReplyDeleteYour nice poem shocked me, I admire what the poet did-
ReplyDelete"I gave it a big shove-it fell away, leaving me free"
Not everyone have have the courage to do that in life.
Wonderfully written! An excellent take on the prompt! Trophies are not always what they seem. =)
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ah...the power of thought...
ReplyDeleteWhen I wrote it down I was only thinking of pensive mood that most of us carry around not wishing to shed it. I like the way how, many of you have interpreted it, in your own ways. That is what makes poetry writing worthwhile.
ReplyDeleteThank you!
Excellent read!
ReplyDeleteKept me awake after midnight - impressed.
ReplyDeletePlease have a good new week.
daily athens
I like the contrast you've created between the first and second stanzas.
ReplyDeleteAh, the curse of holding on. Well done, friend.
ReplyDeleteHard to let go when we dwell on things that dwell in us.
ReplyDeleteIt is hard to let go of that 'over thinking', pensive mindset that corrals many of us. Nice work!
ReplyDeleteGautami the letting go is the hardest part! Nice one!
ReplyDeletePamela
You have expressed the truth of life..very beautifully. Loved it.
ReplyDeleteoh, i am so glad you are free...
ReplyDeletefreedom is the key of everything=P
ReplyDeleteSometimes we don't realize how weighted we are until we begin to shed what binds or blinds us.
ReplyDelete"I gave it a big shove-it fell away, leaving me free" What courage!! Oh how I wish I could do that to something I have carried around for awhile- it would be so liberating-
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