He lifted her veil, looked at her face
Sleep so deep, lashes so long
Casting shadows on her cheeks like lace
Tenderness and desire fighting within
Wanting her, how can that be wrong?
This deep-seeded need, was that lust?
With all his guts, body wanted him to sin.
From tasting her sweetness while she slept
Keeping distance from her was a must
Would rather wait for her to love him!
Terza rima poem...chk out the rhyming pattern, you can see what I mean. except for the last two lines!
Beautiful! :)
ReplyDeletevery nice. you describe the scene so well
ReplyDeleteThanks grey and obifromsouthlondon.
ReplyDeleteKeep coming back. more in store!
hey,...superb technique,,,loved it,.
ReplyDeletevery graphic...beautiful!
ReplyDeleteKeshi.
You should have gone to bed earlier instead of staying up to write poetry.
ReplyDeleteAh but then you wouldn't have written the lovely lines about unremitting love/lust.
Must we suffer so for our Art?
Lovely. Emotive. You made my heart beat. Don't blush. Your passion speaks in this poem.
ReplyDeleteInteresting contrast with your previous post -
ReplyDeleteThanks Keshi and Ghost..:)
ReplyDeleteYes Homo escapeons, I should have but when the writing bug strikes one gotta go it! Thanks!
Thanks Don, one of the best compliments I received for my poem.
Yes Darius, Trying my hands on different genre of writing. My muse seems to be kind...