Sunday 10 June 2012

hang me on your door knob

Still Life, 1670, detail by Jean François de Le Motte
that stub
assorted letters
a notebook
pages from a book
a sealed envelope
newspaper cuttings
I see all those
that expression of yours
when writing
or that intense look when reading
strings of the past lay askew
tied neatly in a disreputable thread
photo frame riveted to the wooden wall
why does it stab at my heart
you hung her head
where did you throw her costume
eyeless she doesn't appear wanting
I can see clearly now
the wicked intricacies of your mind

"I do not wish to be a newspaper cut out,
ribboned to your collection"

36 comments:

  1. Very interesting take on the prompts! Loved esp the last line in quotes! Enjoyed the read... :)

    Old pages invite prying

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  2. her costume is probably somewhere beneath the mess on my desk...thoughtful words

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  3. cool and authentic - solid piece

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  4. Awesome..brilliantly creative..

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  5. ...and the quote infinitely seals it...nice piece...

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  6. This is delightful, fresh, made me smile. Your work is always so.

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  7. I really like the way you work. People are picking up on stuff you may not be deliberately doing even while you are wise enough to choose rich words so that these things can happen. That's the best way.

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  8. Photo frame riveted, your heart stabbed. Disembodied head, costume not in the shot, man, gautami, this is amazing stuff. Peace, Amy
    http://sharplittlepencil.com/2012/06/11/ugly/

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  9. what an emotionally charged piece.. thanks for posting

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  10. This is a really interesting and compelling take on what I thought was a difficult prompt.

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  11. Enjoyed the way you strung or should that be hung this

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  12. "I do not wish to be a newspaper cut out,ribboned to your collection"

    Beautiful words, Gautami! Your verse has a smooth flow

    Hank

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  13. It bites with brash venom in a very stylish way! A lively read!

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  14. Thought provoking and quite sad; the detritus of a lost relationship.

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  15. "strings of the past lay askew
    tied neatly in a disreputable thread"

    My favorite part. This is a delicious read.

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  16. truly wonderful and interesting piece...xx

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  17. Its those traces....those leftover things, some physical, some not that pull the chain of memories and cause them to come raining down. Sometimes I feel I could have tried a little harder to put up with those that I didn't find to my taste...but then again. Wonderful.

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  18. Love the flow of this, and the last two lines are stellar.

    http://www.kimnelsonwrites.com/2012/06/08/lighten-your-own-load/

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  19. A very lovely and well-written poem.......deep and thoughtful

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  20. I love the way you use this poem to explain the way a writer's mind stores away memories, using odd prompts to stimulate the brain into producing their work until one observer realizes that nothing is off limits to a truly creative person. May 'wicked intricacies" continue to plague my mind too!

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  21. Oh so nicely written....and I'm happy that I'm not a newspaper period! Ha! Ha!

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  22. Wow, beautiful! Very good piece of writing.

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  23. I wouldn't want to be part of someone's collection either.
    Well said :)

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  24. I love how you tied in both of these prompts. The last few lines made me smile. I saw a little humor in it, though I know the ending is quite serious. I enjoyed reading your lovely poem.

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  25. Never thought the prompt can lead to something like this too. I am truly honored to read such poetry.

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  26. Very beautiful and brilliant.

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  27. Love the suggestion here. It leads us into dark places.

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  28. Yes, suggestive of dark...well written!

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  29. Really intriguing. I especially liked these iines:

    you hung her head
    where did you throw her costume

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