Sunday 1 January 2012

drifting words

I put the final stitches to that patch
yarn was coming apart
my plum sweater was a gift from the past
the letters had stopped coming
I had not expected the drift
I shovelled that sense of loss
and let the wind stop my thoughts
shouldn't I have spun a tale for friends
change the old to new?

"an image that forms behind the eyes
how do I explain dancing words?"

26 comments:

  1. This flowed fast a furiously. It reads like it came to you quickly from a muse with something to say. Excellent write!

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  2. i liked how you linked this to the old/new theme going around for new year

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  3. Great poem, gautami. You express so many emotions and desires in so few lines.

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  4. No, some secrets of the past should be held tight within you. I love to imagine those dancing words behind your eyes, but don't tell me their secret.

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  5. Regrets, I've had a few...

    Emotive writing. Thank you.

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  6. The tale should be spun, I think, only if the friends are willing to sit still long enough to listen...

    A Whirl of Haiku

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  7. Excellent. I enjoy concise verse like this that gives just the hints of a story. Happy New Year.

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  8. This is beautiful. I especially love the turn it takes in the final lines. Nicely written.

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  9. Very concise and wonderful!

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  10. Beautifully written ! Liked the touch of nostaliga...

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  11. Words in your writings are freely dancing. Always a pleasure to watch that dance.

    no need to explain even if you can.

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  12. I always come here to enjoy what yu write.. and it always leaves me awe strcuk.. Thanks Gautami..for each treat..A very Happy New Year to You and yours..

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  13. nice write here! great flow, nice seeing it up at Real Toads

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  14. I loved the way you shoveled that sense of lost. It expresses it very well.

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  15. A very distinct style uve got!
    Lovely. Keep sharing!

    Happy new year! :)

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  16. I love the imagery in your writing!

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  17. wow, nice, like a whirlwind. or an unraveling sweater. happy new year!

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  18. Beautifully done!
    All the best to you for 2012.

    Kay, Alberta, Canada
    An Unfittie’s Guide to Adventurous Travel

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  19. Wonderful write!

    http://charleslmashburn.wordpress.com/2011/12/31/one-day-at-a-time/

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  20. yeah, i feel this exactly...brilliant write :)

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  21. I like it. The words danced.

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  22. Glad for what you did,

    Happy New Year.

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  23. Loved reading this poem. Thank you for sharing

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  24. Hello.
    I enjoyed reading this. Especially liked the last couple of stanzas.
    Nicely done, as usual!
    Thanks for sharing.

    A Poet's Immortal Thoughts

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