Monday 9 January 2012

chequered windows


thousands of aeon have passed
I grope the air
thatched huts are just beyond that gate
forgotten splotchy hearth reminds me of
my fluttering heart in a rain laden day
a flash of iridescent stones blinds me
I run out of the gate
breathing into cold air
he watches me from above
I detest that condescending look on his face

"rebuild my a pedestal, I will look down upon you"

16 comments:

  1. Strong writing, I can't stop reading it.


    the fluttering

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  2. do you really think it's condescending? i think it's just supposed to be serious leadership.

    days of cohan

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  3. Terrific combination of the wordle with the photo prompt. Your poem can stand without the image, but the photo does lend context to the ending lines. I don't know if I'd call it condescending, but Yul Brynner definitely looks pretty stern and intimidating in that poster.

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  4. Very good write with a good message, too!
    http://charleslmashburn.wordpress.com/2012/01/08/billy-bully-bull/

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  5. Powerful write, Gautami.

    Pamela

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  6. Enjoyed this... especially:

    splotchy hearth reminds me of my fluttering heart in a rain laden day a flash of iridescent stones

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  7. nice...strong verse....condescending is not a good look to feel...

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  8. sad poem of flight - hard to flee a condescentding attitued in the best of times

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  9. amazing pen! I certainly would not want the faces in your image looking down on me. Fantastic write!

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  10. I picture a beautiful young horse,
    who finally finds a way to get out
    of captivity.

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  11. Interesting piece, powerful.
    Best wishes

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  12. Wonderful imagery in this. I have read it several times. Love the photo!

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  13. Gautami,

    Read all pending poems. I think I need to visit more often as when I read so many together it is not easy to decide which touched me more.

    Take care

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  14. "my fluttering heart in a rain laden day" brings about a brilliant feel, sound, and vision.

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