Sunday 20 November 2011

oblivion



drowned in spark,
oblivious of silence;
trapped in smolder
of mindless fire
sky rains diamonds

which fleetingly show their face
and fly away to another planet

33 comments:

  1. magical mystical write...all surround a moment of beautiful love...

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  2. Passion and fire behind this 160. Thanks for playing.

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  3. I like the idea of this couple being "...drowned in spark..."

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  4. "drowned", "oblivious", "trapped". . . then that opening out to "fly away to another planet": effects of being lost to love. Nice tie-in of "spark" with "diamonds".

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  5. This is fabulous. I love the picture, and the movie where it originated. Great work here.

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  6. Yes, the universse has it! Nicely penned.

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  7. super! near and far- for sure- inner and outer space simultaneously!thanks.

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  8. Passionate piece, Gautami.

    Pamela

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  9. Nice. I'm feeling some sparks myself!

    =)

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  10. you really capture the obsession that is love and lust

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  11. "sky rains diamonds"...this is beautiful Gautami!!

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  12. Neat pairing of the two prompts. You really give the best to both of them. "Trapped in smolder" is my favorite

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  13. Stunning image in this, Gautami!

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  14. Drowned in spark - an emotive piece!

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  15. Delightful use of words to create the scene of passion. Love it!

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  16. A moment of perfect love..raining diamonds..such passion!!

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  17. I love this! "Trapped in smolder
    of mindless fire" is an awesome line!

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  18. Might be nice to fly away to another planet. Goodness knows we're making enough mess of this one.
    Lovely prose and great use of the prompt words :)

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  19. What a passionate piece! Couldn't be more different from mine!

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  20. awesome, what a fantastic way of using the words, gautami. mine is nothing compared to this. i couldn't even include all of them. thank you for visiting mine and leaving me a wonderful comment.

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  21. Love’s oblivion: found in ecstasy—lost in tragedy. Such fragile steel from emotions wrought.

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  22. I love your poem. It's sparkly and diamond encrusted.

    http://mysticmissive.blogspot.com

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