Sunday 27 November 2011

fulcrum of my thoughts

anger spinning out of control
I lash out at you
my face so ruddy
your smug smile incenses me

I find that untidy envelope
gullible words rustle in my ear
I shudder in a subliminal way
but sunshine mellows me

you, the fulcrum of my thoughts,
make anger rush out.
come, let me hold you close,
let me exist in a fool's paradise.

25 comments:

  1. Gorgeous write, Gautami. I've been there, love the words here.

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  2. Great take on the prompt! I love this and can totally relate!!

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  3. I like your metaphors. In particular I like the lines, 'I find that untidy envelope/ gullible words rustle in my ear'

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  4. This made me smile. Enjoyed the ride of these thoughts. Nice poem.

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  5. Wow, the surprising turnaround took me by surprise. Love the last line. "Been there, done that, Got the t-shirt!" :-)

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  6. very evocative of past relationships gone bad but what is life without a little illusion?

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  7. Love the choice of words. Enjoyed it. :)

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  8. You have created a richness of emotion.

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  9. very well written indeed.we all connect with the emotions in our own ways.

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  10. Awesome poem... I really like the ending.

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  11. Hm... fool's paradise is not a good place to visit, eh?

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  12. Those smug smiles set me off, too!

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  13. what a bittersweet proposition!!!:(
    my entry: http://lynnaima.wordpress.com/2011/10/28/ratatouille/

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  14. Wonderful!

    Really a fool's paradise...:D

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  15. oooh, I love this, the last line sums it all up! ah, yes the Fool's paradise...we all end up visiting that place! Remarkable~

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  16. Spectacular use of the wordle words! I really struggled with this one.

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  17. I really like this one, Gautami. One of the smoother uses of those difficult words that I’ve seen. You brought them all together beautifully.

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  18. How is your day?

    Time flies, appreciated your handsome inputs to our poetry picnic.

    Share a poem today.
    Bless you.
    Happy December,
    Enjoy A Wonderful Wednesday Ahead.

    xoxox

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