Sunday, 24 February 2013

blurred into nothingness


Venus de Milo with Drawers, 1936, Salvador Dali
a sublime moment of truth
tears into the limits
pieces of patience
tests the heroic prophets
loneliness is stealing into the heart
dry eyes find themselves gazing into space
myriads of everything are hidden in the drawers
yet the monarch stands tall

"broken discipline takes away the winds
monday will bring it into order
only to make it slowly disintegrate until further orders"


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22 comments:

  1. Gerry@Strummed Words24 February 2013 at 09:09

    Interesting your seeing the sculpture as representing a monarch. It does fit! Nice words.

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  2. Mametz24 February 2013 at 09:25

    I especially like the line - loneliness is stealing into the heart - it sums up the picture.

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  3. Laurie Kolp24 February 2013 at 10:05

    I love the ending... great poem.

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  4. Lisa Williams24 February 2013 at 11:21

    "loneliness is stealing into the heart" is a wonderful line, great poem!

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  5. The Write Girl24 February 2013 at 11:54

    Amazing verses with vivid imagery. Each subsequent line builds upon the other. Nicely written.

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  6. Heidi24 February 2013 at 12:04

    Clever use of both prompts, and they seem to go together effortlessly.
    171

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  7. Kathe W.24 February 2013 at 12:24

    Love the last line. thipsi

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  8. Stan Ski24 February 2013 at 12:25

    There's always the 'further orders'...

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  9. Veronica Roth24 February 2013 at 13:53

    I want to know what's in the drawers! Nicely whirled. :)

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  10. Granny Smith24 February 2013 at 14:21

    As always, you have wrapped your sensitivity around an image. Beautifully done!pubjuum

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  11. Sherry Blue Sky24 February 2013 at 17:55

    I love the loneliness line, and the prophets - and, especially, the title.

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  12. oldegg24 February 2013 at 19:07

    I suppose all of us have drawers hidden with secrets. Why not the Venus too who Dali ensured first that she couldn't open them. I saw a conjectural reconstruction once of where her arms would have been...they just didn't look right!

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  13. Akila G24 February 2013 at 23:50

    Yet it stands tall..to find order only to disengage again...so very typical of the human mind!

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  14. Akila G24 February 2013 at 23:51

    stands alone, cut out to engage and disengage on orders. So very akin to the human mind! :)

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  15. Yvonne Osborne25 February 2013 at 05:04

    I love your last line. She does stand tall.

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  16. Karen S.25 February 2013 at 10:06

    Wonderful, and silly isn't it how Mondays have a way of doing just that!

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  17. Kim Nelson25 February 2013 at 10:17

    Yet the monarch stands tall... made me think back a few decades to the fall of the Shah of Iran.

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  18. Kutamun26 February 2013 at 02:02

    I lke the mlitary accent , Gautami , cheers

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  19. Ruchi Jain26 February 2013 at 08:50

    its nice..

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  20. typewriterpoet26 February 2013 at 15:36

    my gosh the last part about monday's are words to chew on I loved it!

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  21. Tess Kincaid27 February 2013 at 10:42

    Don't ask...don't tell...

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  22. Sue27 February 2013 at 16:30

    "hidden in the drawers..."

    I wondered what was hiding in there!

    Well done.

    =)

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