Thursday, 8 February 2007

Transposition.....Poetry Thursday



This weeks' prompt is change. This is what came out of my thoughts.
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Transposition


with blazing tranquility
i stare at space,
seeing the various changes
vividly inside my mind.
the purple shades,
the orange hues,
intense colours
of my life
passing by.

shaking out
desolate thoughts’
i come out whole,
conceding decisively
my happiness
is what I am.

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34 comments:

  1. sage8 February 2007 at 09:19

    maybe you should dedicate this poem to Descarte.

    The tranquility seem interrupted with the whirling colors, which creates in my mind a disconnect, but it seems to come back together at the end. Am I readin this correctly, is it what you meant?

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  2. Homo Escapeons8 February 2007 at 09:46

    Let us not put Descartes before des horse because his four rules were:
    1 Never accept anything except clear and distinct ideas
    2 Divide each problem into as many parts as are needed to solve it
    3 Order your thoughts from simple to complex
    4 Always check for oversights

    et VOILA we have the perfect prescription for ruining a poem!

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  3. gautami tripathy8 February 2007 at 09:50

    I really like it! Two non-poets disecting my poem. Welcome! Maybe both of you will help me write a thesis!

    I dedicate this poem to you both!

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  4. Regina Clare Jane8 February 2007 at 10:12

    Whoa- I was just going to write something simple like "I really liked this, Gautami!"
    Ah well- I did, especially the last sentence.
    Thanks!

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  5. floots8 February 2007 at 10:19

    the last two lines say it for me
    and indeed for all of us

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  6. polona8 February 2007 at 10:20

    i like this very much, gautami.
    great solution!

    my happiness
    is what I am
    yes!

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  7. Poet with a Day Job8 February 2007 at 10:22

    I like the idea of auras being what the speaker of the poem sees changing inside the mind.

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  8. writerwoman8 February 2007 at 10:43

    I am depressed today but that poem cheered me some. The last few words make me feel better, like I am good enough however I am.

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  9. January8 February 2007 at 11:29

    Brilliant! Love these lines:

    "i come out whole,
    conceding decisively
    my happiness
    is what I am."

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  10. Kai C.8 February 2007 at 12:29

    wonderful as always

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  11. /t.8 February 2007 at 13:19

    i agree
    the happiness
    line is punchy,
    but taken on whole,
    this bit 'intense colours of my life passing by' really hits the poetic mark, imo

    very colorful, again -- nice work

    /t.

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  12. david santos8 February 2007 at 15:06

    Very nice.
    Love you
    Tank you

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  13. Lady Wordsmith8 February 2007 at 15:22

    This has such a strong finish - quite decisive indeed!

    I loved reading this!!

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  14. Tammy8 February 2007 at 17:00

    Lovely thoughts written eloquently and ended with a bang :)

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  15. Amalendu8 February 2007 at 21:48

    true... my happiness is what I am...

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  16. J. Andrew Lockhart8 February 2007 at 22:12

    perfect ending!

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  17. Pat Paulk9 February 2007 at 05:06

    "am", or what I want to be. Love it!!

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  18. Crafty Green Poet9 February 2007 at 05:20

    blazing tranquility - excellent!

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  19. Jone9 February 2007 at 05:42

    The first two lines and the last two are so strong. A powerful poem indeed.

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  20. Norma9 February 2007 at 06:21

    I'm very sensitive to color and hue and its emotional impact but I've never thought about it the way you've presented it. Great job!

    Thanks for visiting today.

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  21. GeL9 February 2007 at 06:43

    Hi G,

    I like reading your process of change. I can imagine flashes or prisms of color whirling, dancing, beckoning and whatnot as you take charge and decide your path, in life: "Whole" not in partial shapes (indeciveness nor setbacks) Accepting oneself is essential to happiness. Nice response to this poetic prompt.

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  22. Lotus Reads9 February 2007 at 07:38

    conceding decisively
    my happiness is what I am

    Wow, Gautami, that is powerful! It makes me want to be happy and in the end, that is what it is isn't it? Happiness is a decision. Thanks very much for these wonderful words.

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  23. strauss9 February 2007 at 08:12

    shaking out
    desolate thoughts’
    i come out whole

    Interesting lines, what a shout of positivity...refreshing.

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  24. twilightspider9 February 2007 at 13:38

    I love the optimism here too - this is poetry as affirmation!

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  25. ecm9 February 2007 at 14:25

    I like your ending and the line, "shaking out/desolate thoughts" I agree that I too like the optimism

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  26. Don Iannone9 February 2007 at 14:45

    I like this one a great deal! nice job Gautami. Hope you are well.

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  27. Beth9 February 2007 at 22:36

    Wow.

    Thank you for stopping by my blog. I do see what you mean.

    Thank you.

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  28. giggles10 February 2007 at 01:41

    Were you reading MY mind? Jesting of course! Those colors walking together bring me immense happiness! A life without color is love without passion! Love your poem...with a powerful ending!

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  29. I Am10 February 2007 at 04:33

    "my happiness is what I am"

    BRAVO to Self Realization! We now need to practice Happiness continously to Create bigger Changes.

    I Am

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  30. Dennis10 February 2007 at 05:24

    Last four lines for me as well! I agree. Wonderful.

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  31. Beloved Dreamer10 February 2007 at 07:52

    I love your poem gautami, you had me at the last two lines. It would seem we roll around in this vast universe only to become the best thing of all. Happines! Lovely


    love-bd

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  32. .......deb10 February 2007 at 08:28

    Hi guatami,

    I'm clapping, too. Lovely and hopeful. Especially taken with "conceding decisively/
    my happiness", and the colors to set tone. My mind went to a glorius sunrise.

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  33. G10 February 2007 at 08:36

    A cheerfully meditative and satisfyingly conclusive poem!

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  34. magiceye10 February 2007 at 23:03

    colorfully manic!

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