tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6820615718469502862.post8123435301473082437..comments2023-10-05T03:12:14.296-07:00Comments on poemette: running away with it----Read Write Poem/Monday Poetry Traingautami tripathyhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/04192356825699543613noreply@blogger.comBlogger21125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6820615718469502862.post-92092437478432048702008-05-31T05:58:00.000-07:002008-05-31T05:58:00.000-07:00I like the image of the tentacles transforming int...I like the image of the tentacles transforming into flowers and buds - I imagine vines twisting around.Jenniferhttp://www.magpiedays.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6820615718469502862.post-83194035094539487442008-05-29T16:30:00.000-07:002008-05-29T16:30:00.000-07:00visually pulsating.. so much movement throughout.....visually pulsating.. so much movement throughout... especially liked the end note... kick it away, not wanting it...one more believerhttp://pieceofpie.wordpress.com/2008/05/29/brush-strokes/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6820615718469502862.post-24821399564625456422008-05-28T00:02:00.000-07:002008-05-28T00:02:00.000-07:00Yes, really enjoyed the surrealist element to this...Yes, really enjoyed the surrealist element to this, you did a good job.Johttp://florescence.wordpress.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6820615718469502862.post-29360830867513176642008-05-27T13:38:00.000-07:002008-05-27T13:38:00.000-07:00I enjoyed the image that you painted with your wor...I enjoyed the image that you painted with your wordsiamnasrahttp://www.blogger.com/profile/16030794699915000249noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6820615718469502862.post-47191945483651072072008-05-27T06:55:00.000-07:002008-05-27T06:55:00.000-07:00The last two lines really give the poem a nice tur...The last two lines really give the poem a nice turn. Wonderfully vivid.Nathan1313http://www.blogger.com/profile/11552467037640904091noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6820615718469502862.post-85288494638962054552008-05-27T03:15:00.000-07:002008-05-27T03:15:00.000-07:00Fly-away hearts can be a problem, but they're ...Fly-away hearts can be a problem, but they're ours - we made them.anthonynorthhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/06680944720744601697noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6820615718469502862.post-83529650818650880102008-05-27T00:13:00.000-07:002008-05-27T00:13:00.000-07:00"when I do find it floating on waterI kick it..."when I do find it floating on water<br>I kick it away, not wanting it"<br><br>you had these in quotation marks, so I wasn't sure if they were your words or a quotation... regardless, it's a fabulous last line.Danika / OpenChannelhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/06472222686878922186noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6820615718469502862.post-19391291404468127532008-05-26T22:10:00.000-07:002008-05-26T22:10:00.000-07:00I'm with Polona...many layers to this one. So ...I'm with Polona...many layers to this one. So much in life we think we want. We get close to it and at times get it and decide that is not what I want. The mind is a bed of unrest. My sense...Don Iannonehttp://www.blogger.com/profile/01922412641433868679noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6820615718469502862.post-55788685981087087432008-05-26T18:50:00.000-07:002008-05-26T18:50:00.000-07:00This is very different for you, G, and I really li...This is very different for you, G, and I really like it. I had to read it through twice and I'm still not entirely certain I get it. There's so much going on in here!Susan Helene Gottfriedhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/12778191943289129869noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6820615718469502862.post-41412269542103960372008-05-26T16:39:00.000-07:002008-05-26T16:39:00.000-07:00i could see and feel everything! very imaginative....i could see and feel everything! very imaginative.polkadotwitchhttp://polkadotwitch.wordpress.com/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6820615718469502862.post-66240132399007164322008-05-26T16:08:00.000-07:002008-05-26T16:08:00.000-07:00One can read so much into it!One can read so much into it!Stevehttp://www.blogger.com/profile/16715829842292110540noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6820615718469502862.post-53957805132674192282008-05-26T12:56:00.000-07:002008-05-26T12:56:00.000-07:00powerful and multilayered...powerful and multilayered...polonahttp://www.blogger.com/profile/12631341810150848122noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6820615718469502862.post-35855549403084559972008-05-26T10:22:00.000-07:002008-05-26T10:22:00.000-07:00Hi,Gautami. I enjoyed reading your poem. I read it...Hi,Gautami. I enjoyed reading your poem. I read it as a 'rites of spring/the agony and ecasty of creation/birth piece. Good work.<br>David MascellaniAnonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6820615718469502862.post-43685242430160467382008-05-26T10:13:00.000-07:002008-05-26T10:13:00.000-07:00I love how your heart blossomed in an unexpected p...I love how your heart blossomed in an unexpected place, in aplace where you treasured it, unlike the water.mariacristinahttp://mariacristina.wordpress.com/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6820615718469502862.post-65088862980017670962008-05-26T09:35:00.000-07:002008-05-26T09:35:00.000-07:00lovely; i have missed reading youascenderrisesabov...lovely; i have missed reading you<br><br>ascenderrisesabove.com/wordpressAscenderRisesAbovehttp://www.blogger.com/profile/04635424605245677136noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6820615718469502862.post-78754159898835234192008-05-26T08:25:00.000-07:002008-05-26T08:25:00.000-07:00I love the image of the trees and buds and flowers...I love the image of the trees and buds and flowers blossoming where the heart used to be. <br><br>This is one of those poems I'm going to be thinking about all day!Linda Jacobshttp://www.blogger.com/profile/14459940700516084069noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6820615718469502862.post-8916410286070508552008-05-26T07:52:00.000-07:002008-05-26T07:52:00.000-07:00A wonderful piece!A wonderful piece!Noah The Greathttp://www.blogger.com/profile/04603792157174161967noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6820615718469502862.post-12815419385888540212008-05-26T07:21:00.000-07:002008-05-26T07:21:00.000-07:00I can't help but wonder if the "fly-away ...I can't help but wonder if the "fly-away heart" was not the narrator's to keep in the first place. You know? the "if you love something set it free" kind? <br><br>And in setting it free, the narrator frees herself too?sister AEhttp://havingwrit.blogspot.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6820615718469502862.post-52312216318133073242008-05-26T07:10:00.000-07:002008-05-26T07:10:00.000-07:00It feels like summer! And I found it to be all the...It feels like summer! <br>And I found it to be all the emotions you go through went loving again after an heartbreak!Jillhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/12871047592501542942noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6820615718469502862.post-13998133255588641132008-05-26T06:59:00.000-07:002008-05-26T06:59:00.000-07:00Hmm. The narrator seems freed by the loss of a too...Hmm. The narrator seems freed by the loss of a too-emotional heart. But how could the person 'feel' free without that heart?Julia Smithhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/15392455413201190775noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6820615718469502862.post-14359491019628883442008-05-26T01:19:00.000-07:002008-05-26T01:19:00.000-07:00very well done. surreal like dreaming in Salvador...very well done. surreal like dreaming in Salvador Dali.<br><br>my poem this week is a story of a ravishing.Joy Reneehttp://www.blogger.com/profile/04976987581528470589noreply@blogger.com