tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6820615718469502862.post7824344159968032582..comments2023-10-05T03:12:14.296-07:00Comments on poemette: geometry of fireworks cuts into megautami tripathyhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/04192356825699543613noreply@blogger.comBlogger20125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6820615718469502862.post-48449881377639916032009-09-06T12:04:31.415-07:002009-09-06T12:04:31.415-07:00deep and sad that we have turned out this way - de...deep and sad that we have turned out this way - destructive.LadyGarfieldhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/12121342651646756315noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6820615718469502862.post-56771651533329219572009-09-04T17:38:22.065-07:002009-09-04T17:38:22.065-07:00Nice, Gautami!Nice, Gautami!Paul Oakleyhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/17426789386840488470noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6820615718469502862.post-52758112881490220002009-09-03T17:58:04.697-07:002009-09-03T17:58:04.697-07:00It's a very cynical world out there...It's a very cynical world out there...Stan Skihttp://says-sir-ten.blogspot.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6820615718469502862.post-74760004315080364142009-09-03T17:42:13.099-07:002009-09-03T17:42:13.099-07:00so good..."geometry of fireworks cuts into me...so good..."geometry of fireworks cuts into me"...love it and cuts into meWayne Pitchkohttp://www.blogger.com/profile/15376196523487344143noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6820615718469502862.post-45100157585629468302009-09-03T16:55:31.936-07:002009-09-03T16:55:31.936-07:00I love the ending line, and the language and self-...I love the ending line, and the language and self-awareness throughout.Francis Scudellarihttp://www.blogger.com/profile/01008685302028451297noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6820615718469502862.post-79084505113126185022009-09-03T15:54:48.552-07:002009-09-03T15:54:48.552-07:00I like "your kaleidoscope tents dot my farm&q...I like "your kaleidoscope tents dot my farm" - very cool image.djvorreyerhttp://djvorreyer.wordpress.com/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6820615718469502862.post-61155859940694742282009-09-03T15:28:50.851-07:002009-09-03T15:28:50.851-07:00I like how you've somehow conveyed the perform...I like how you've somehow conveyed the performer as a real person.Irene Tohhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/12918979903066830662noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6820615718469502862.post-63891106397526025532009-09-03T14:56:46.230-07:002009-09-03T14:56:46.230-07:00The sadness and desperation permeate the whole pie...The sadness and desperation permeate the whole piece beautifully. Especially liked the first line...Cynthia Shorthttp://www.blogger.com/profile/12386358503730817278noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6820615718469502862.post-88891781763452178692009-09-03T14:25:00.094-07:002009-09-03T14:25:00.094-07:00I love the ferris wheel image, how with the horses...I love the ferris wheel image, how with the horses and the tents the performer physically becomes the carnival.davidmooltenhttp://davidmoolten.wordpress.com/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6820615718469502862.post-71288255952296296052009-09-03T14:24:57.599-07:002009-09-03T14:24:57.599-07:00I love this line: "you walk all over my heart...I love this line: <br><br>"you walk all over my heart with hobnailed boots"<br><br>Lots to think about in this one and I like all your word choices!Linda Jacobshttp://www.blogger.com/profile/14459940700516084069noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6820615718469502862.post-73692161846657026272009-09-03T12:20:07.933-07:002009-09-03T12:20:07.933-07:00This is great! Your tone and images are so strong ...This is great! Your tone and images are so strong here.Nathanhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/11552467037640904091noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6820615718469502862.post-66268983902182282162009-09-03T11:36:55.370-07:002009-09-03T11:36:55.370-07:00The lyrical I has got the whole world in his brain...The lyrical I has got the whole world in his brain and in his mirror and in his brain and in his brain and ...<br><br>Best wishes<br>RalfRBroekerhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/08602494065251750620noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6820615718469502862.post-76656515912504186952009-09-03T10:19:43.068-07:002009-09-03T10:19:43.068-07:00From Therese B. at RWP -- The words you choose hav...From Therese B. at RWP -- The words you choose have historical and cultural resonances. The voice speaking seems to belong to a Mexican who is aware that his painful life results, in part, from the "rodeo show" conquests of invading Europeans. The word "geometry" to me conjures up the civilizations of Central or South American indigenous populations.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6820615718469502862.post-39735548710993441882009-09-03T10:10:47.633-07:002009-09-03T10:10:47.633-07:00Mmmm. I love the inner conversations with the read...Mmmm. I love the inner conversations with the reader, especially noting one's own use of cliche... wondering about the metaphor of the experience itself.Julie Jordan Scotthttp://juliejordanscott.typepad.com/jjspoetry/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6820615718469502862.post-25848170727093847122009-09-03T10:01:16.354-07:002009-09-03T10:01:16.354-07:00Ah, the truth, "my wails ail no one apart fro...Ah, the truth, "my wails ail no one apart from myself." Especially when there is no one to hear. I like this.<br>DHDonald Harbourhttp://woodennickel.wordpress.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6820615718469502862.post-61057928172437249732009-09-03T09:40:20.390-07:002009-09-03T09:40:20.390-07:00The pain of the performer that has to entertain th...The pain of the performer that has to entertain the public even though he is sad because his own pain, problems...very well captured. As well as the feeliong of losing one's own heritgage and identity (ferris wheels...., i love all the lines after)Annamarihttp://www.blogger.com/profile/06611955404994410354noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6820615718469502862.post-64111609644679105132009-09-03T08:48:52.983-07:002009-09-03T08:48:52.983-07:00Wow, I love the way the contradictions in the line...Wow, I love the way the contradictions in the lines work together. Good job.Sagehttp://www.sagecoveredhills.blogspot.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6820615718469502862.post-13983619024158000082009-09-03T06:13:15.855-07:002009-09-03T06:13:15.855-07:00You clearly see this street performer as a sad, do...You clearly see this street performer as a sad, down trodden soul. I like your descriptive phrases and imagery, "lunatic world watches", "ferris wheel rolls" and the "kaleidoscopic tents" . thank your for sharing this insightful writing.Lindahttp://www.blogger.com/profile/03241402645242821612noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6820615718469502862.post-90863474950560727662009-09-03T05:25:43.477-07:002009-09-03T05:25:43.477-07:00Hello Gautami,A world being destroyed by this army...Hello Gautami,<br><br>A world being destroyed by this army of selfish thrill seekers, trampling on lives and feelings!Derrickhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/00861397533660827678noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6820615718469502862.post-80874903320919017042009-09-03T02:54:23.173-07:002009-09-03T02:54:23.173-07:00Whoa! Deep and powerful.Whoa! Deep and powerful.anthonynorthhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/06680944720744601697noreply@blogger.com