tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6820615718469502862.post7543769065789273315..comments2023-10-05T03:12:14.296-07:00Comments on poemette: A common enough story in broken linesgautami tripathyhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/04192356825699543613noreply@blogger.comBlogger29125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6820615718469502862.post-74622684705802508782008-02-13T19:55:00.000-08:002008-02-13T19:55:00.000-08:00oh this is beautiful, common enough, but one that ...oh this is beautiful, common enough, but one that goes unnoticed in the rush of things..you captured true sacrifice.ULhttp://ul-typingaway.blogspot.com/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6820615718469502862.post-9702217752310186602008-02-13T19:19:00.000-08:002008-02-13T19:19:00.000-08:00I love your story-telling. Lovely characters.I love your story-telling. Lovely characters....debhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/14744896385434246402noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6820615718469502862.post-65795037493415379962008-02-12T12:13:00.000-08:002008-02-12T12:13:00.000-08:00the ending is happy but you cannot help but admire...the ending is happy but you cannot help but admire someone who gives up a dream and all for love.cocaine jesushttp://www.blogger.com/profile/00519621428036481426noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6820615718469502862.post-27081792581576902432008-02-12T11:52:00.000-08:002008-02-12T11:52:00.000-08:00powerful write!powerful write!polonahttp://www.blogger.com/profile/12631341810150848122noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6820615718469502862.post-76894828340555095542008-02-11T23:27:00.000-08:002008-02-11T23:27:00.000-08:00Very powerful, you have really conjured up the man...Very powerful, you have really conjured up the man with his grace and dignity and strength with great skill, the reader is drawn into his thoughts, hears him thinking, a great poem conjuration of a scene with living people, very cool,gingataohttp://gingatao.wordpress.com/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6820615718469502862.post-75863380171355535062008-02-11T21:03:00.000-08:002008-02-11T21:03:00.000-08:00Julia, I corrected that. A typo, me thinks! Thanks...Julia, I corrected that. A typo, me thinks! Thanks.<br><br>Weighed against family, nothing has meaning.I have seen this happening, although I did change this a bit. <br><br>Brave, I think I will develop this further like you say. I might follow a series of verses. Thanks for the idea.gautami tripathyhttp://firmlyrooted.blogspot.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6820615718469502862.post-36775865705597686152008-02-11T20:14:00.000-08:002008-02-11T20:14:00.000-08:00This is beautiful, Gautami. Hope born out of trage...This is beautiful, Gautami. Hope born out of tragedy, an all too common struggle in human existence. You captured it vividly.Square1http://www.blogger.com/profile/13559171378908608414noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6820615718469502862.post-59447057598469999552008-02-11T18:50:00.000-08:002008-02-11T18:50:00.000-08:00Very good. The poem demonstrates this man's pr...Very good. The poem demonstrates this man's priorites, and the insignificance of his personal sacrifices in light of the more important things - his family - most of whom he has already lost. <br>Just a suggestoin, maybe build on their mutual loss, she being his last remaining family member, and the strength each other provides.The Bravehttp://www.blogger.com/profile/00282554943243721918noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6820615718469502862.post-36137048065134033512008-02-11T18:26:00.000-08:002008-02-11T18:26:00.000-08:00A great sacrifice for him, but very rewarding, I&#...A great sacrifice for him, but very rewarding, I'm sure. Love the ending, 'whispering sweet nothings etc.'SweetTalkingGuyhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/10023449074796269533noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6820615718469502862.post-76480040492233051732008-02-11T17:30:00.000-08:002008-02-11T17:30:00.000-08:00This is a beautiful story written by a poet who ge...This is a beautiful story written by a poet who gets better and better with each post! I always look forward to reading yours!Linda Jacobshttp://www.blogger.com/profile/14459940700516084069noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6820615718469502862.post-84656618662988455562008-02-11T17:00:00.000-08:002008-02-11T17:00:00.000-08:00what could life be if we all figured out that Love...what could life be if we all figured out that Love is the only important thing?<br><br>very moving story<br><br>thanx for visiting.Joy Reneehttp://www.blogger.com/profile/04976987581528470589noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6820615718469502862.post-67987906948181104212008-02-11T14:54:00.000-08:002008-02-11T14:54:00.000-08:00Yes indeed. The better part of wisdom is to find a...Yes indeed. The better part of wisdom is to find and hold true treasure.ishhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/11496438591610659902noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6820615718469502862.post-31282719938736379682008-02-11T14:35:00.000-08:002008-02-11T14:35:00.000-08:00At first it made me think about "A walk to re...At first it made me think about "A walk to remember", then I read it was his sister!<br>And I always thought love and laughter are the best remedy!Jillhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/12871047592501542942noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6820615718469502862.post-89052465844077902092008-02-11T12:10:00.000-08:002008-02-11T12:10:00.000-08:00So emotional. Absolutely beautiful and poignant. T...So emotional. Absolutely beautiful and poignant. Takes my breath away.writerwomanhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/07645753712657412094noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6820615718469502862.post-82065362867220480832008-02-11T10:16:00.000-08:002008-02-11T10:16:00.000-08:00That was unedited? Wow.Pain and hope - you made th...That was unedited? Wow.<br>Pain and hope - you made the struggle powerful. I liked the message - sacrificing the material for the love of family.<br>Beautiful.Wylie Kinsonhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/09271148590574475682noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6820615718469502862.post-72863861799783798062008-02-11T09:20:00.000-08:002008-02-11T09:20:00.000-08:00Many times, it is the care and love of family that...Many times, it is the care and love of family that create the real healing. A bittersweet poem my friend.Brianhttp://hummingbunny.wordpress.com/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6820615718469502862.post-80686002531678409212008-02-11T09:13:00.000-08:002008-02-11T09:13:00.000-08:00how sad for him but I think he sees joy in his sis...how sad for him but I think he sees joy in his sisterlissahttp://www.justwritingwords.com/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6820615718469502862.post-10748593897966965292008-02-11T07:32:00.000-08:002008-02-11T07:32:00.000-08:00Very cool!Very cool!R.G. ALEXANDERhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/05690665241880768094noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6820615718469502862.post-57993640751135404692008-02-11T06:52:00.000-08:002008-02-11T06:52:00.000-08:00Sacrificing possessions or even degrees for love i...Sacrificing possessions or even degrees for love is noble, and the returns are even greater. <br><br>You tell a moving story in just a few lines. Impressive!mariacristinahttp://mariacristina.wordpress.com/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6820615718469502862.post-44088974999721021282008-02-11T05:21:00.000-08:002008-02-11T05:21:00.000-08:00what an unselfish loving man you portray here.. hi...what an unselfish loving man you portray here.. his sister is blessed to have him....paisleyhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/08231453820728399262noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6820615718469502862.post-85721391259783402072008-02-11T03:48:00.000-08:002008-02-11T03:48:00.000-08:00How incredibly moving.How incredibly moving.Selmahttp://selmainthecity.wordpress.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6820615718469502862.post-62850902451905443882008-02-11T02:59:00.000-08:002008-02-11T02:59:00.000-08:00Told how it is, or how it should be. Career, mater...Told how it is, or how it should be. Career, material values ... nothing without this kind of sacrifice, given freely.anthonynorthhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/06680944720744601697noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6820615718469502862.post-51825513439078680532008-02-11T00:47:00.000-08:002008-02-11T00:47:00.000-08:00lovely storylovely storyCrafty Green Poethttp://www.blogger.com/profile/02486633917197181851noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6820615718469502862.post-42374471675784079412008-02-11T00:06:00.000-08:002008-02-11T00:06:00.000-08:00This is tender and sentimental without being cloyi...This is tender and sentimental without being cloying, a wonderful beginning that will need little if any tweaking.chicklegirlhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/03000215636803243874noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6820615718469502862.post-6485991091083297102008-02-10T21:01:00.000-08:002008-02-10T21:01:00.000-08:00Awesome poem. :)Awesome poem. :)Annhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/17968479919482739686noreply@blogger.com