tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6820615718469502862.post6423720515919643624..comments2023-10-05T03:12:14.296-07:00Comments on poemette: ashes of radiating electronsgautami tripathyhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/04192356825699543613noreply@blogger.comBlogger20125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6820615718469502862.post-51644626374453243992011-08-12T21:15:41.920-07:002011-08-12T21:15:41.920-07:00This fits with a post by Christopher and my respon...This fits with a post by Christopher and my responce to his I will post here. Visceral,Now<br>strong cutting, and wounded is how I feel after reading this. May I have permission to post this on my blog?<br> <br> <br>only me 8/12/11<br><br>The pain is exquisite<br>My soul cries out from beyond me<br>Where once there was us<br>Now only me<br>The setting for you at my life’s table<br>Still there, unfilled<br>Plate just so<br>Utensils unused, pristine<br>How else could it be?<br>Without you in my life<br>AS before us<br>Now only meHe ment well (sometimes did)http://www.blogger.com/profile/12384347526625976847noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6820615718469502862.post-16831925664458688332011-08-12T20:40:18.684-07:002011-08-12T20:40:18.684-07:00A lovely, powerful piece that pulls from the deep....A lovely, powerful piece that pulls from the deep. I love this.Tumblewords:http://www.blogger.com/profile/04279038951489894119noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6820615718469502862.post-37480202243548770902011-08-12T19:01:26.191-07:002011-08-12T19:01:26.191-07:00love the title, for someone who lives with sleepin...love the title, for someone who lives with sleeping issues, I understand this oneChristinehttp://www.blogger.com/profile/10433262472050607402noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6820615718469502862.post-36499344096078515432011-08-12T08:11:38.814-07:002011-08-12T08:11:38.814-07:00Powerful piece, beautiful...Powerful piece, beautiful...brenda whttp://undercaws.wordpress.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6820615718469502862.post-78385578072869300652011-08-12T06:49:50.806-07:002011-08-12T06:49:50.806-07:00The last stanza -- especially the last two lines -...The last stanza -- especially the last two lines -- are cutting. It does hurt when someone edits you from their life...and even more painful when done slowly. Well done.<br><br>-NicoleRaven's Wing Poetryhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/08576438868694047958noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6820615718469502862.post-24879540046919887512011-08-11T18:27:33.750-07:002011-08-11T18:27:33.750-07:00That last line is enigmatic.That last line is enigmatic.irenehttp://enerihot.wordpress.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6820615718469502862.post-8036542738443122642011-08-11T16:41:03.708-07:002011-08-11T16:41:03.708-07:00Thanks for your visit to my site...and for leaving...Thanks for your visit to my site...and for leaving your link. A nicely-written piece! Reminds me of Isaiah 61:3.whenwordsescapehttp://whenwordsescape.wordpress.com/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6820615718469502862.post-63117480662918968932011-08-11T16:13:37.536-07:002011-08-11T16:13:37.536-07:00What terrible sadness you have captured in this be...What terrible sadness you have captured in this beautiful poem. I can feel the hurt and and see the determination to move on, but not without the pain.oldegghttp://www.blogger.com/profile/14727444489103758018noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6820615718469502862.post-47861921368304048952011-08-11T13:18:35.527-07:002011-08-11T13:18:35.527-07:00The last two lines of your sonnet wrap it up beaut...The last two lines of your sonnet wrap it up beautifully. Collect the ashes and use them to build a shrine. One of the more powerful statements I’ve ever read. We’ve all experienced collecting the ashes, too often the shrine has no foundation.Mike Patrickhttp://thepoetsquill.wordpress.com/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6820615718469502862.post-81119854482040647182011-08-11T11:55:18.652-07:002011-08-11T11:55:18.652-07:00Great imagery. "edit me from you life/ with y...Great imagery. <br>"edit me from you life/ with your paring knife" - Great lines!Jessica Prescotthttp://www.blogger.com/profile/10775984664764629241noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6820615718469502862.post-35058999118067869032011-08-11T10:47:45.199-07:002011-08-11T10:47:45.199-07:00impressed.impressed.Morninghttp://www.blogger.com/profile/05532576755186051550noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6820615718469502862.post-40604538514846579252011-08-11T10:03:31.996-07:002011-08-11T10:03:31.996-07:00Pamela, thanks or asking. I have not been too well...Pamela, thanks or asking. I have not been too well. I have missed your poetry. Entirely my loss...gautami tripathyhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/04192356825699543613noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6820615718469502862.post-71614610502508978742011-08-11T10:00:02.780-07:002011-08-11T10:00:02.780-07:00A charged up poem radiating power!!A charged up poem radiating power!!Nankahttp://www.blogger.com/profile/05428694673909046094noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6820615718469502862.post-87079111429132831092011-08-11T09:58:29.529-07:002011-08-11T09:58:29.529-07:00Gautami, that opening stanza is gorgeous. Pamelabt...Gautami, that opening stanza is gorgeous. <br><br>Pamela<br>btw How have you been? I hope well.flauberthttp://www.blogger.com/profile/18424439866515694972noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6820615718469502862.post-27647592231006120562011-08-11T05:28:17.298-07:002011-08-11T05:28:17.298-07:00We all pass on into electrons..it has to think of ...We all pass on into electrons..it has to think of being erased completely..you have conveyed this perfectly..Jaejaerosehttp://www.blogger.com/profile/11509244123008832611noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6820615718469502862.post-19229400009445754902011-08-11T03:25:11.348-07:002011-08-11T03:25:11.348-07:00Power-packed lines...especially the opening line,I...Power-packed lines...<br>especially the opening line,I liked it a lot...:)<br>Interesting title!Erratic Thoughtshttp://www.blogger.com/profile/14852558150033296079noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6820615718469502862.post-21387390412909419842011-08-10T22:21:02.845-07:002011-08-10T22:21:02.845-07:00Direct as it might seem at first, yet retains much...Direct as it might seem at first, yet retains much at that creative moment (when truth can go lots of ways) like surreal I mean. Just a mere six inches to one side, but that's enough to awaken the skin, wonder about the touch of this poem. Strong AND interesting! Thanks. <br>~neilneil reidhttp://bearlyaudible.wordpress.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6820615718469502862.post-81712827362958945832011-08-10T21:44:42.820-07:002011-08-10T21:44:42.820-07:00I will stay awake all night,night after night, whi...<i>I will stay awake all night,<br>night after night, <br>while you edit me from your life<br>with your paring knife</i><br><br>Great lines. Loved the staying awake to avoid the dreams.Bonehttp://www.blogger.com/profile/10096591352278195759noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6820615718469502862.post-18016560150972844102011-08-10T15:02:00.902-07:002011-08-10T15:02:00.902-07:00Thanks...gave me an ideaI shall use the spin(elect...Thanks...gave me an idea<br><br>I shall use the spin<br>(electrons often go left)<br>to build this castle.christopherhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/04201537517464996231noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6820615718469502862.post-56276950915703862332011-08-10T12:22:13.046-07:002011-08-10T12:22:13.046-07:00wow so powerful good for you.This is a strong voic...wow so powerful good for you.This is a strong voice.Sheilagh Leehttp://www.blogger.com/profile/13741333943021570641noreply@blogger.com