tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6820615718469502862.post6205511223097718554..comments2023-10-05T03:12:14.296-07:00Comments on poemette: ravens chase out thoughts from the mindgautami tripathyhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/04192356825699543613noreply@blogger.comBlogger41125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6820615718469502862.post-60269015380264566692009-08-14T18:33:07.150-07:002009-08-14T18:33:07.150-07:00Fabulous. I was there with the crows and those bot...Fabulous. I was there with the crows and those bottles in the ocean. The last lines are haunting.jonehttp://deowriter.wordpress.com/2009/08/15/one-single-impression-ocean/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6820615718469502862.post-6394028083346514812009-08-13T19:51:23.465-07:002009-08-13T19:51:23.465-07:00The imagery in this piece is stunning, especially ...The imagery in this piece is stunning, especially : <br><br>these raven black birds<br>scrutinise with expressionless eyes<br>before attacking those with a gusto<br>the birds squint just as soon to search<br>for moistness to go with the crumbs<br><br>Amazing how relaxed observation can lead to deep realization.<br><br>Well done. Enjoyed every minute of it.gabriellehttp://wildgoosescoopsmoon.blogspot.com/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6820615718469502862.post-19955187323404442742009-08-12T12:22:11.559-07:002009-08-12T12:22:11.559-07:00This one is amazing. Each line overflows with wel...This one is amazing. Each line overflows with well-chosen words and leaves me wanting to read more, more, more.<br><br>Coincidentally, I just caught part of "Message In A Bottle" the other night on TV :)Bonehttp://www.blogger.com/profile/10096591352278195759noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6820615718469502862.post-40045747997956729172009-08-11T22:44:37.101-07:002009-08-11T22:44:37.101-07:00very interesting ending.very interesting ending.J. Andrew Lockharthttp://www.blogger.com/profile/12567156257114496618noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6820615718469502862.post-69832691547071523602009-08-11T19:50:11.626-07:002009-08-11T19:50:11.626-07:00Love how you tie three diverse sets of imagery int...Love how you tie three diverse sets of imagery into that twisty ending.Julia Smithhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/15392455413201190775noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6820615718469502862.post-81156043354562438402009-08-11T19:06:53.288-07:002009-08-11T19:06:53.288-07:00Enjoyed how you revealed an even truth than that w...Enjoyed how you revealed an even truth than that with which you started. Lovely!thelittlewriterthatcouldhttp://thelittlewriterthatcould.wordpress.com/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6820615718469502862.post-9120880554652055552009-08-11T13:42:09.483-07:002009-08-11T13:42:09.483-07:00That you chose a very social bird is saying someth...That you chose a very social bird is saying something.<br>Nice poem.fourwindshaigahttp://fourwindshaiga.wordpress.com/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6820615718469502862.post-14225593151291430432009-08-11T13:40:52.360-07:002009-08-11T13:40:52.360-07:00finding oneself adrift in a sea of hungar...thaz b...finding oneself adrift in a sea of hungar...thaz beautiful g...one more believerhttp://pieceofpie.wordpress.com/2009/08/11/engage/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6820615718469502862.post-36509304159177425272009-08-11T09:11:16.169-07:002009-08-11T09:11:16.169-07:00I like how this poems is so full of 'visual...I like how this poems is so full of 'visual' images, almost jostling each other in immitation of the birds you describe. And the title is beautiful, has a wonderufl rhythm to it!Deborah Godinhttp://notesfromthecloudmessenger.blogspot.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6820615718469502862.post-18382659615838593312009-08-11T08:23:24.828-07:002009-08-11T08:23:24.828-07:00I love this...especially the ideas of thoughts bei...I love this...especially the ideas of thoughts being like messages in smoked green bottles. The imagery is brilliant and the last stanza says it all!Pattihttp://www.blogger.com/profile/04993186190720192589noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6820615718469502862.post-1545846626157604312009-08-11T06:22:31.708-07:002009-08-11T06:22:31.708-07:00Thoughts in bottle, tossed over the ocean.Might th...Thoughts in bottle, tossed over the ocean.<br>Might they get seasick or lonely?spacedlawhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/12462723005560128474noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6820615718469502862.post-45656946424531694452009-08-11T06:15:56.164-07:002009-08-11T06:15:56.164-07:00Ouch. Brilliantly done.Ouch. Brilliantly done.Patoishttp://www.blogger.com/profile/07764936858778730692noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6820615718469502862.post-41395485344725840542009-08-10T19:25:45.750-07:002009-08-10T19:25:45.750-07:00Nicely done - love the circling and tidal feelings...Nicely done - love the circling and tidal feelings here.Tumblewords:http://www.blogger.com/profile/04279038951489894119noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6820615718469502862.post-57126692768746546202009-08-10T18:46:45.945-07:002009-08-10T18:46:45.945-07:00I like this very much. Lovely writing :)I like this very much. Lovely writing :)Bobbiehttp://constantcurrent.blogspot.com/2009/08/ocean.htmlnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6820615718469502862.post-24132200040327527772009-08-10T17:01:49.917-07:002009-08-10T17:01:49.917-07:00Yes, the first part has a lot of power. And I lik...Yes, the first part has a lot of power. And I like the change of view in stanza two.<br><br>Best wishes<br>RalfRBroekerhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/08602494065251750620noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6820615718469502862.post-59013789703308344942009-08-10T07:00:36.924-07:002009-08-10T07:00:36.924-07:00Follow your heart, it knows best.I hesitated on th...Follow your heart, it knows best.<br><br>I hesitated on those 'smoked out green bottles' hiding the messages inside.<br>Why is it that we always envision a smokey (mine are brownish colored) bottle with the messages inside? <br>Our minds do this, I hadn't seen the concept on paper or screen before. I believe we like to add to the mystery and linger on the anticipation a little longer.<br>..Jimhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/02982249173214655060noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6820615718469502862.post-70889242423184885922009-08-09T22:24:55.994-07:002009-08-09T22:24:55.994-07:00Interesting how in the end we often have new reali...Interesting how in the end we often have new realizations. <a href="http://miztlee.blogspot.com/" rel="nofollow"><br>Spirithelpers</a>Tammie Leehttp://www.blogger.com/profile/09018402134070834516noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6820615718469502862.post-1834666655996783522009-08-09T21:02:58.242-07:002009-08-09T21:02:58.242-07:00great images--can see it!and last two lines--can f...great images--can see it!<br><br>and last two lines--can feel it!artpredatorhttp://artpredator.wordpress.com/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6820615718469502862.post-73705867345138094912009-08-09T17:14:08.238-07:002009-08-09T17:14:08.238-07:00choosing to be present or absent from one's li...choosing to be present or absent from one's life is a difficult choice. the essence of a relationship has to be fulfilling to both parties involved. well done. have a great night.Michelle Johnsonhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/15157059633840032305noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6820615718469502862.post-10227983296224434182009-08-09T07:01:43.598-07:002009-08-09T07:01:43.598-07:00Terrific imagery and resolution - thanks for shari...Terrific imagery and resolution - thanks for sharing it!<br><br>--SoCLarry McCayhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/09148257008691597958noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6820615718469502862.post-66659488272330665282009-08-09T06:01:48.344-07:002009-08-09T06:01:48.344-07:00Your words painted the picture so well.Liked the l...Your words painted the picture so well.Liked the last verses very much.swapnaphttp://swapnap.wordpress.com/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6820615718469502862.post-23673960304459608262009-08-09T05:39:59.790-07:002009-08-09T05:39:59.790-07:00it's fascinating isn't it, how distraction...it's fascinating isn't it, how distractions sometimes allow the mind to solve the puzzle on its own. love the images here, the birds are so very alive.Suehttp://www.blogger.com/profile/07764262558160301061noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6820615718469502862.post-41557093027119617102009-08-09T03:18:05.873-07:002009-08-09T03:18:05.873-07:00I feel the struggle to be alone in this one. A wel...I feel the struggle to be alone in this one. A well-wrougt, palpable image.SandyCarlsonhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/10752798823532580733noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6820615718469502862.post-10011076776447793182009-08-09T02:55:30.005-07:002009-08-09T02:55:30.005-07:00Great one here..Great one here..Meghahttp://www.blogger.com/profile/08456122349556682811noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6820615718469502862.post-33901502983874887912009-08-09T00:10:18.104-07:002009-08-09T00:10:18.104-07:00Fascinating images co-existing and interweaving ~ ...Fascinating images co-existing and interweaving ~ immediate, past and future frames! Intriguing communal sense of association, connection, detour and vibration!Greyscale Territoryhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/17466540188839321484noreply@blogger.com