tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6820615718469502862.post1154860295797574887..comments2023-10-05T03:12:14.296-07:00Comments on poemette: convolution----terzanellegautami tripathyhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/04192356825699543613noreply@blogger.comBlogger22125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6820615718469502862.post-52503583545411666182009-04-20T10:13:00.000-07:002009-04-20T10:13:00.000-07:00If it weren't for the mind's ability to ad...If it weren't for the mind's ability to adapt I think I wouldn't make it through some of those harder times that hit. This is a nice reminder of those times we need to adapt and move on. Well done. Have a nice day.Michelle Johnsonhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/15157059633840032305noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6820615718469502862.post-72164947814904979902008-03-09T10:05:00.000-07:002008-03-09T10:05:00.000-07:00well done! i admire everyone who undertakes these ...well done! i admire everyone who undertakes these structured forms and makes them work.polonahttp://www.blogger.com/profile/12631341810150848122noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6820615718469502862.post-42054650484216482502008-03-04T13:16:00.000-08:002008-03-04T13:16:00.000-08:00I know nothing of poetry...hehe...it seemed like a...I know nothing of poetry...hehe...it seemed like a prose/poem to me? Your vocabulary always amazes me anyhow!Just Jenhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/06461423815235750171noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6820615718469502862.post-12894332392763940552008-03-04T08:51:00.000-08:002008-03-04T08:51:00.000-08:00Within chaos theory there must be an explanation f...Within chaos theory there must be an explanation for this. I commend you, Gautami, for your willingness to branch out and try new styles and formats. Brave woman!Don Iannonehttp://www.blogger.com/profile/01922412641433868679noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6820615718469502862.post-83307345013278909352008-03-03T16:52:00.000-08:002008-03-03T16:52:00.000-08:00wow.. that looks really hard.. i have to check it ...wow.. that looks really hard.. i have to check it out and see if i can write on... you did a great job as always.. you do so well with form.....paisleyhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/08231453820728399262noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6820615718469502862.post-72378194799250085022008-03-03T13:03:00.000-08:002008-03-03T13:03:00.000-08:00Wow, that must have been hard to write! You're...Wow, that must have been hard to write! You're brave, and good for us that you are.Rethabilehttp://www.blogger.com/profile/03523368313680103826noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6820615718469502862.post-10208645500656754852008-03-03T12:50:00.000-08:002008-03-03T12:50:00.000-08:00"adaptability is strength of character"I..."adaptability is strength of character"<br><br>I love this! It says so much! You did such a good job! Yes, it rhymes, but your rhymes are fresh and different!Linda Jacobshttp://www.blogger.com/profile/14459940700516084069noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6820615718469502862.post-87497138519919699482008-03-03T11:47:00.000-08:002008-03-03T11:47:00.000-08:00Wow. Good job, lady! I agree with julia, too. V...Wow. Good job, lady! I agree with julia, too. Very nice.pepektheassassinhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/13494251587598676788noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6820615718469502862.post-19582219736109748492008-03-03T08:09:00.000-08:002008-03-03T08:09:00.000-08:00This one was very deep, but illuminating.This one was very deep, but illuminating.anthonynorthhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/06680944720744601697noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6820615718469502862.post-53195599065823072722008-03-03T08:04:00.000-08:002008-03-03T08:04:00.000-08:00The lines shift and change like sand on a beach. I...The lines shift and change like sand on a beach. I love words like "shimmer, suface, sage, soothing, recede...," the alliteration of sibilants mimics the shimmering thoughts.<br><br>I hope you keep writing these. I've never tried one myself. It looks more complicated than the pantoum, a form I just discovered from the prompt.Christinehttp://mariacristina.wordpress.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6820615718469502862.post-84034961910429316832008-03-03T07:07:00.000-08:002008-03-03T07:07:00.000-08:00I like your free verse, it sounds intriguing even ...I like your free verse, it sounds intriguing even if doesn't quite come together. still quite an interesting read.lissahttp://www.justwritingwords.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6820615718469502862.post-45613431301173943472008-03-03T06:45:00.000-08:002008-03-03T06:45:00.000-08:00Gautami I know these feelings/thoughts if I don...Gautami I know these feelings/thoughts if I don't know the style. Very good!!Pat Paulkhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/03673667238840127360noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6820615718469502862.post-25966165256954654082008-03-03T05:36:00.000-08:002008-03-03T05:36:00.000-08:00you are quite welcome!you are quite welcome!sister AEhttp://havingwrit.blogspot.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6820615718469502862.post-7558466313462688182008-03-02T23:11:00.000-08:002008-03-02T23:11:00.000-08:00well donethis holds together so welland i love the...well done<br>this holds together so well<br>and i love the idea of feelings which "shimmer to the surface"<br>(our minds must be in tune - just finished a villanelle - not done one for ages) :)flootshttp://www.blogger.com/profile/01530734765701940680noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6820615718469502862.post-20182263438444817752008-03-02T22:43:00.000-08:002008-03-02T22:43:00.000-08:00yay for free verse...but you do well with forms!la...yay for free verse...but you do well with forms!<br><br>labryinth i thought was an interesting title suggestion for this works circuitousnessartpredatorhttp://artpredator.wordpress.com/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6820615718469502862.post-42102069679805881932008-03-02T22:21:00.000-08:002008-03-02T22:21:00.000-08:00lovely! So very clever too.Keshi.lovely! So very clever too.<br><br>Keshi.Keshihttp://www.blogger.com/profile/17147250771662427208noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6820615718469502862.post-13415768728542106522008-03-02T22:17:00.000-08:002008-03-02T22:17:00.000-08:00I really related to the flow of this; my mind move...I really related to the flow of this; my mind moves a lot like this, where thoughts circle, brush up against eachother, rearrange, and something comes out of it all that is (to me at least) beautiful and intuitive.<br><br>So what I'm saying is, this made sense to me! (and I loved it!)chicklegirlhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/03000215636803243874noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6820615718469502862.post-8668798097646505572008-03-02T20:08:00.000-08:002008-03-02T20:08:00.000-08:00Wow, this is a mind bender!Wow, this is a mind bender!noahthegreathttp://noahthegreat.wordpress.com/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6820615718469502862.post-79697328788256024522008-03-02T18:51:00.000-08:002008-03-02T18:51:00.000-08:00I really like that fact that it touch the fact tha...I really like that fact that it touch the fact that our mind changes with time and that we becomes more able to adapt ourself to the situation of our everyday life!Jillhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/12871047592501542942noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6820615718469502862.post-44602831622376352372008-03-02T18:06:00.000-08:002008-03-02T18:06:00.000-08:00Don't give up on the terzanelles, Gautami. Thi...Don't give up on the terzanelles, Gautami. This one retains its logic even as it ambles through its labyrinth.<br><br>I like:<br>'as pottering in the gardens, planting herb-sage <br>amongst others. flowers can ever be so soothing<br>to the mind’s eye where thoughts circle in a maze-'Julia Smithhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/15392455413201190775noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6820615718469502862.post-12256170397446100722008-03-02T15:21:00.000-08:002008-03-02T15:21:00.000-08:00Nice, I need to go pull Mary Oliver's handbook...Nice, I need to go pull Mary Oliver's handbook off the shelf as a reminder of style! Good for you for experiementing.sagehttp://www.blogger.com/profile/17499891950639742366noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6820615718469502862.post-46164089894660339992008-03-02T10:24:00.000-08:002008-03-02T10:24:00.000-08:00May I suggest "Labyrinth" as a title? O...May I suggest "Labyrinth" as a title? Or "Convolution"?<br><br>Whatever you call it, it may be disorienting, but somehow it holds together nonetheless.sister AEhttp://havingwrit.blogspot.comnoreply@blogger.com