tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6820615718469502862.post1080846929460747664..comments2023-10-05T03:12:14.296-07:00Comments on poemette: sweetness of my yearning collapsesgautami tripathyhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/04192356825699543613noreply@blogger.comBlogger20125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6820615718469502862.post-73679894111947057662009-07-03T22:38:46.010-07:002009-07-03T22:38:46.010-07:00I am imagining this sequence spans months and repr...I am imagining this sequence spans months and represents the phases of recovery from a failed relationship. I'm not so sure the end is a happy one... perhaps more of a new beginning than an ending.pjdhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/05028687955957107957noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6820615718469502862.post-7312195942167707742009-07-03T10:34:33.634-07:002009-07-03T10:34:33.634-07:00I thought it would end by a sad note. But thanks f...I thought it would end by a sad note. But thanks for the happy ending<br><br>http://fullofcherries.blogspot.com/2009/07/victory.htmlMeghahttp://www.blogger.com/profile/08456122349556682811noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6820615718469502862.post-56466980630966951902009-07-03T09:45:08.658-07:002009-07-03T09:45:08.658-07:00the waiting is usually the worst but the reward is...the waiting is usually the worst but the reward is so much better in the end, at least that's how this poem seems to melissahttp://www.justwritingwords.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6820615718469502862.post-82600256141888535432009-07-02T08:23:31.472-07:002009-07-02T08:23:31.472-07:00Beautifully written! :)Sweet verse!Beautifully written! :)<br>Sweet verse!Just someonehttp://www.blogger.com/profile/05292308457359940182noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6820615718469502862.post-89780301110267279752009-07-02T07:59:00.611-07:002009-07-02T07:59:00.611-07:00its awsome!very nicely done!its awsome!<br>very nicely done!shraddhahttp://theselfloveproject.wordpress.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6820615718469502862.post-43472474607249440422009-07-02T01:04:29.288-07:002009-07-02T01:04:29.288-07:00Nice. I like the flow.Nice. I like the flow.venus66http://www.blogger.com/profile/17804023747114879683noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6820615718469502862.post-16242357712940985192009-07-01T23:07:37.717-07:002009-07-01T23:07:37.717-07:00I love the simplicity and the repetition in this. ...I love the simplicity and the repetition in this. So deceptively spare, but it packs a delicious punch!Ann (bunnygirl)http://www.maelstromrock.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6820615718469502862.post-88478491947613087692009-07-01T20:46:47.614-07:002009-07-01T20:46:47.614-07:00Oh I LOVED the ending! It was such a surprise, and...Oh I LOVED the ending! It was such a surprise, and had a real oomph to it. I can't explain myself perfectly - will you understand me if I say, your intention with this worked.sarah haliwellhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/03818420999930644450noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6820615718469502862.post-30995089183186073292009-07-01T20:21:00.716-07:002009-07-01T20:21:00.716-07:00ah i feel the yearning!ah i feel the yearning!floretahttp://www.blogger.com/profile/18220834824793299258noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6820615718469502862.post-4642762543908743432009-07-01T19:13:34.543-07:002009-07-01T19:13:34.543-07:00This turned out happy - I thought maybe it would n...This turned out happy - I thought maybe it would not be so. Nice!Tumblewords:http://www.blogger.com/profile/04279038951489894119noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6820615718469502862.post-41641370204671077342009-07-01T18:19:40.463-07:002009-07-01T18:19:40.463-07:00The simplicity of this is wonderful. It reminds m...The simplicity of this is wonderful. It reminds me of Jane Kenyon's "Otherwise." (But I like yours better!)Linda Jacobshttp://www.blogger.com/profile/14459940700516084069noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6820615718469502862.post-87059188580860188792009-07-01T15:58:11.079-07:002009-07-01T15:58:11.079-07:00The repetitive lines only added to her yearning......The repetitive lines only added to her yearning...with a happy outcome.Fledgling Poethttp://www.blogger.com/profile/00834386300886224116noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6820615718469502862.post-15042140897995117262009-07-01T15:41:48.018-07:002009-07-01T15:41:48.018-07:00love the short lines and the repetition--it works ...love the short lines and the repetition--it works well!angiehttp://therer2doors.wordpress.com/2009/07/01/strawberry/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6820615718469502862.post-25916102381529014812009-07-01T12:07:44.207-07:002009-07-01T12:07:44.207-07:00I liked the build up to the ending. the ending ma...I liked the build up to the ending. the ending made me smile.Daily Panichttp://www.blogger.com/profile/06179183072566661932noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6820615718469502862.post-68976221332630166562009-07-01T08:38:47.384-07:002009-07-01T08:38:47.384-07:00As I read this, I kept thinking, yes, it's lik...As I read this, I kept thinking, yes, it's like this, and this - wonderful!!Deborah Godinhttp://notesfromthecloudmessenger.blogspot.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6820615718469502862.post-68408686707895703942009-07-01T07:45:22.575-07:002009-07-01T07:45:22.575-07:00very nice... esp the title :)being a participant o...very nice... esp the title :)<br>being a participant of 3ww myself, i could get to know the inspiration quick...<br><br>coming to ur post, i like the repetitive use of "you are not here"... the anxiety and wait could be seen easily... nicely done...Leohttp://www.blogger.com/profile/09351446518713188860noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6820615718469502862.post-89129492968315441682009-07-01T06:54:57.152-07:002009-07-01T06:54:57.152-07:00the repeat of the single line really makes this wo...the repeat of the single line really makes this work on the whole. The sweet anticipation builds until that moment.<br><br><a href="http://thomg.blogspot.com/2009/07/wednesdays-three-word-wednesday.html" rel="nofollow">Ritual</a>ThomGhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/13286670695334830471noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6820615718469502862.post-70246342239360799722009-07-01T06:50:17.444-07:002009-07-01T06:50:17.444-07:00Ah, the anticipation.Ah, the anticipation.anthonynorthhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/06680944720744601697noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6820615718469502862.post-83854362080033106322009-07-01T06:42:12.003-07:002009-07-01T06:42:12.003-07:00Phew, glad you found him/her, love the way you got...Phew, glad you found him/her, love the way you got all the words into the title!<br><3andyhttp://properjoes.blogspot.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6820615718469502862.post-45856309134701547192009-07-01T06:32:06.684-07:002009-07-01T06:32:06.684-07:00Love the title you chose for this one. At first I ...Love the title you chose for this one. At first I thought this was about the loss of someone close but the ending redirected my thoughts. Great write. Hope all is well.Michelle Johnsonhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/15157059633840032305noreply@blogger.com