Thursday 2 June 2011

vitally bereft

I seek an empty space
insanity, you call it
an erratic path-
I walk in a straight line
luminous light from eyes of a deer
lead me to a small alcove
I hide my heart in there,
walk back to waste land

"bereft of something vital, 
I feel so light-
I call it an omen"

26 comments:

  1. Dear Gautami: Lightness of being as soul lifts off. The imagery and introspection are eluding to something..."eyes of a deer"
    and "hide my heart". How "bereft of something vital" leaves one open to open. My prayer is
    to reverse this; unomen the opening which only expects miracles. Very desert "wastelandish" Hope you find the "vital" again. Heartfelt wishes and thank-you!

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  2. Beautifully done! Funny how others call it insanity.

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  3. Gautami...
    You just keep getting better and better each week.
    A beautiful piece of work.
    Loved your 55.
    Thanks for playing, and have a Kick Ass Week-End

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  4. a little insanity is not a bad thing though...may your heart be unhidden once more....

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  5. Insanity to some is merely reality to others. I love the nature aspect to this.

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  6. It's a good place to leave one's heart.

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  7. I'm being forced to walk in straight lines while my heart wants to wander. I understand this completely!

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  8. above all else guard the heart...

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  9. Insanity sometimes keeps you safe..haunting words..as always..Jae

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  10. This leaves me thinking about my own insanity, my heart and my path. What a great write. Thank you.

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  11. I've always been intrigued by omens, I love the way you close your story.

    Beautiful!

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  12. The unbearable lightness of that empty space between 'now' and 'then'... hold it gently with open hands and see what may come.

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  13. Sometimes, losing is more important than having...

    Beautiful verse!

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  14. ...I hide my heart in there..

    We have all done that at times...

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  15. It's the sane ones that are crazy.

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  16. Well stated...
    Wants to walk on straight lines and how detours happen as planned..:)
    Great work, as always!

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  17. One person's insanity is another person's normal. Nicely done.

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  18. Beautiful and heartbreaking. You sure do write so much in so few words.
    I don't know if it was intentional, but the Wasteland (eliot) allusion works well here.

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  19. The first two lines make the impact and hence I found them the most prominent.

    But then the heart needs to be next to you:)

    ~Harsha

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  20. Beautiful and nothing at all wrong with insanity in fact I think its inherent in most artists, intense passion

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  21. love the contrast here, very nicely done. Erratic path, immediately followed by straight line. Enjoyed this. Thanks for sharing:)

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  22. That place of emptiness is what we create to be filled with the divine...at least that's how I see it. Beautiful.

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  23. Sheilagh Lee said well done truly lovely poem beautiful imagery,

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  24. tense yet the piece holds you in its grip :)
    enjoy the potluck!
    http://lynnaima.wordpress.com/2011/06/03/omega/

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  25. gautami, I am here after a long time.. Love this poem.. Nice 55..

    Someone is Special

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